Not really complaining. But it feels like you've used too many fancy words just for the sake of it. It kinda takes away from the reading experience. I feel like sometimes simple words would do.

banger start mate. Gives me kidnapped dragon vibes.

holy. that was a cool strart.

Yes. He doesn't know.

Not much planning goes through while writing this story. I'm mostly going to write this to rack up some writing experience. I don't even know where the story's going to end up xD. Nevertheless do give it a try. And if the story does incite you. Let me know in the comments. It would mean the world to me if someone enjoyed my story.

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I want him to have a sibling

I love your story dude.

One of the best Chinese Naruto fanfics. The MC is not OP from the start and actually trains himself to become stronger. The characters feel real and alive and the plot keeps progressing and the story kees getting better and better. Had a great time reading, recommend it to all.

I tried, I really tried to push myself to read through the fanfic but in the end I decided to drop it. The plot is interesting and the story had a solid first chapter, Sasuke is potrayed pretty well in this fic but the the character of Naruto in this fic is a total turn off for me. It is not at all the actual character of Naruto and he just feels like an OC. Droped it half way through.

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