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    The world building and plot is really interesting. I'm really enjoying the unique setting. Still I feel like you're telling the reader too much instead of showing us naturally. There are a lot of info dumps that seem unnatural or irrelevant to the plot. Other than that it's a pretty solid beginning and I'm excited to read more.

    Ch 1 Chapter 1: Enter Navar Okayasu! The Child Who Dreams of Becoming a Warrior
    Ozania Odyssey
    Fantasy · Daniel_Lane_4048
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