(First chapter review only) General thoughts: It's alright. Nothing exactly exciting or intriguing has occurred to draw in much investment. Kinda stereotypical orphanage setting. Very show rather than tell writing. Obviously, it's the first chapter so much can't be said about the world or characters in the long-term, yet there is still so much lacking. Not enough is given to the reader to warrant more interest in the world or characters. Besides, maybe a poorly built fling and the protagonist being an orphan.

All good. I really love the story writers always improve with time so I can't wait to see how much your writing changes and how the story develops.

I thank thee