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Falxie2yrCommentedRando pronoun switch attack :/
Even so, this time he still felt her body floating. Feeling something was wrong, she immediately opened her eyes. Shortly after she opened her eyes, she saw an endless vast universe, as if she were thrown into space.- Falxie2yrCommented
Does he believe in a god that coukd create a boulder so heavy tge god themselves couldn’ t lift? Paradox for the win.
'Is this really a game? Or different natural laws? A different world?' Ali believed in the existence of a God who could do anything that was considered impossible. - Falxie2yrCommented
*think
'I just want to help.' 'What did I do wrong?' Young Ali began to sink into the sea of self-blame. - Falxie2yrPosted
Overall the story is great. Let me say this before anything else. Character design is good but not great. We have the general and expected patterns applied at least till chapter ~40. Worldbuilding is also not bad. Not much is revealed in the beginning though you discover more and more hints how this world functions, which is great and makes up the general naming of regions (They are are named after the cardinal directions). The reason why my rating is so low is the horrendous grammar. Genders get swapped, tenses messed up, words go missing, syntax and semantic are shredded, singular and plural are decided by the throw of the dice. I get that the author is not a native but is it really that hard to get grammerly or a similar free software to check the writing before you post? Can’t comment on the yuri yet. I’m only ~40 chapters in and the relationship is still in a budding stage. Is cute though. A little too much plot armour in some cases but imho it’s tolerable.
- Falxie2yrReplied to Falxie
Directed at the comments here.
Snowy's instinct kicked off and her body suddenly jolted as she felt someone was setting its gaze on her like a predator waiting to devour its prey as a whole! - Falxie2yrCommented
She didn’t know about his obsession though xD
"Anyway, where were we before?" Elder Yang coughed and bring back the previous topic, "Ah, yes. After Snowy heard about the Sect Master order, she suggested using herself as a lure to trap the enemies. At that point, she was confident the culprit was indeed Feng Luo, and with his obsession toward her, he would somehow try to coerce you to help him get his hand on her. Exploiting that obsession, she would strike when they dropped their guard and force the hidden Nascent Soul expert to come out from his hiding spot." - Falxie2yrReplied to Sleeping_Fox_UwU
I get you. And it’s not like it takes more than 30sec to get grammerly installed… xD
"Does a human whose brain has rotten can make still alive?" Snowy tilted her head innocently. - Falxie2yrCommented
No it’s in the Waterfall Town… xD
"Hmm, Phoenix Pavilion in Phoenix city, is it? Why such a precious treasure suddenly appears in a backwater place?" Sect Master furrowed his brow seemingly had a deep thought. - Falxie2yrCommented
How high is the fee of the Auction House? If the items sell for 100 million a 5% fee would only cover the gifted cores. A 10% fee would only yield double the gifts amount so not really worth it for a one time transaction. Either the fee is awefully high at 15%+ or some hidden agenda is at play.
"We will not charge it. Consider it as a gift." - Falxie2yrReplied to Stemdapple
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Yeah, this is probably me thinking with my pussy, she thought, but whatever. I got this far, I may as well. - Falxie2yrReplied to Chroniclerope
This is golden!
Later, at night, Ash was reading through the books Satsuhiro had brought her. She understood what he meant about it being time-consuming, as when she started reading the Light book, specifically the part about the Lumina's Presence spell, she saw a bar pop up over her own head and slowly start to fill. She guessed that when it filled up, it meant she knew how to cast the spell. So, she kept reading, as well as her school drop-out mind could allow her to. - Falxie2yrReplied to Stemdapple
Get your head out of the gutter xD That was a perfectly normal response and not sexual.
"I look forward to that." - Falxie2yrCommented
This exact conversion happened earlier already. Including the next paragraph
"Once you've mastered a spell, you don't need to recite the words anymore. Additionally, you can pass your knowledge of a spell to someone else instantly, though they won't have it mastered when they receive it." - Falxie2yrCommented
Good job, min-maxing like it’s done in games doesnt work in real life. thank u for not ignoring the other stats
Luck: 100 - Falxie2yrCommented
She wants to ravish her in a dark alley giggle
She shook her head. Whatever strange feeling had gained a hold over her faded momentarily. Right. Focus. Deal with this thing and you can get Kaori out of here, to a nice secluded location where you can... She shook her head again. - Falxie2yrCommented
Earlier it was said that they dont have the manpower to kill the nightmare so they have to send the 2 trainee saviors. but now the counsel just captures it? Yea… we need explaining how this task which is harder to accomplish my an order of magnitude can suddenly be done so easily
There wasn't much to do, really. Satsuhiro and Ash could only wait until the Nightmare was retrieved from the prison, which of course she'd no longer be using for training as it was decided that the creature would be made to fight Kaori in her trial. - Falxie2yrReplied to Joseph_Stahl_1249
She wasnt starving… it was even stated so when her iron stomach ability was explained
"Because," Ash quickly responded, "even if I'm working for a bunch of ignorant douchebags, it beats starving," Ash stated. "I don't owe any of these people anything other than killing a few demons whenever it's my turn to do that. Besides that, Jade could go up in flames tomorrow and I'd watch it burn all night, and I wouldn't feel a thing." - Falxie2yrReplied to _Morgoth_
Yes because stupidity
"Very well," the courier declared, "let me know when you wish to leave." - Falxie2yrCommented
Mmmh hybrid demon with Lust and light&dark alignment but her light alignment increases faster. Wouldnt surprise me if that is relevant
The next day, it was a slow morning as Ash could feel her body was sore from everything she'd done. Her attunement was at 25% for Light and 15% for Dark, her Strength was still at 6 and her Dexterity had gone up by 1, now at 4. Productive, all in all, she thought. - Falxie2yrCommented
Vouching for soneine is no small matter at all. Basically you take full responsibility for someone else actions. Very risky. No one would do what Keiko just did.
"I'd... I think I can vouch for her." Keiko stepped in. "I haven't exactly known Kaori for long, but I never got the sense that she was bloodthirsty in any way. I think we should wait for this alchemist's response before we do anything else."