B in the but should be capital.
bevome should be become
who saw his naked instead of say
Instead of using and repeatedly u can make it a separate sentence. For ex:- talking about his snake. Zhang shin realized
but there were many disciples and elder who say his naked figure and some female disciples were currently talking about his snake and zhang shin realized the situation he was in as his face bevome completely blue and white in embarrassment and he hastily grab his cloth and wear them but just as he put his cloth on he heard ....