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? which previous question. whether or not he's ever had his fill or whether or not he thought he could be forgiven by the sky god?
author, I am proud and happy that you admitted at the beginning of the book that you were doing a lot of rewriting and you knew there was mistakes in the amount of mistakes are outstandingly large mostly with misspellings but other things as well but luckily still I am able to read it and understand everything you wanted to present it will be quite a good book when you get all the errors completed
Author, iruppted is not a word.. maybe you meant invaded?
Author fix error . Squeezing her throat
why doesn't he wash the chicken feathers and then use them to make a softer bed by making a mattress cushion out of them instead of burning them. it was mentioned previously that his bed was hard
oops. or maybe add ...... as he was a young boy... it was a miss on my part
change young boy to young girl
when is he going to eat one of the precious chicken eggs since he has some extras I mean since their bed with Spirit food then there should be some benefits to eating one. just a thought it's probably coming up in the next chapter but I've been thinking about it
I am not familiar with what the bonnet would be for her head and earlier chapter it was mentioned that he had a bonnet on his head when he woke up perhaps author could explain or add a meme picture of what this bonnet would be?
it wasn't wine she was drinking it was whiskey
wrong name she mentioned herself instead of her sister's name. author
probably plucked it from his butt cheek
so she started with nori when she was 5 years old and he only stayed for 3 years so it 8 years old she had never been to school. and she never had to go to school.
hey there Author I wonder about the similarity in the main female lead first name is so similar to the first name of the female lead in your other book. perhaps there's a girl you like that's name is similar to both of those giggle giggle tease tease