Laevateins
I came up with my idea for my book when I walked my dog, I guess that pretty much just sums me up.
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You may think its cliche, but I implore you to read more of the story .
What do you mean "Eww"
Thanks for letting me know, I just fixed it now
I understand where you are coming from, I don't know how much you've read but yes, the MC thinks he is cool and is overconfident, but soon learns over time that he isn't that strong. I implore you to read the rest of my book and if you still have this opinion let me know. Thanks for the review, but it would be nice to know what you liked as well seeing as you gave me 4 stars.
And Z yeah, hopefully it is still understandable
The reason he didn't was because he was cocky, and didn't think he needed to
I think this book has a lot of potential. The concept is amazing, and I am really interested to see how the story progresses. The world background is really well done and the descriptive writing is also amazing at some points. A couple things that I personally didn't enjoy: -The dialogue style isn't the type I really enjoy reading, for me it ruins the flow when you write it like its a script, but that's just a personal issue. -The amount of info it dumps in the beginning can be a bit overwhelming, another personal thing. Don't let the small and nit-picky problems discourage from reading this novel. It has a lot of potential and I am going to continue reading as I am excited for its development. Keep going author you are doing great!
I think there is too much info here xD. Maybe spread it out a little more because hard to absorb,
Now thats a lot races
He slapped himself xD?
So this is a world made of diamonds I am assuming its not part of the same universe as Japan, so are the names just based off the Japanese or is it related?
I also enjoyed this chapter, the emotions are amazing, just a little complicated xD.
I can imagine the devastation
Wow, I can imagine that pretty well, that is a biigggggg world. Its cool trying to imagine what it would would feel like living on that world.
Me with Raiden Shogun