Darksky_ll
I'm just a random guy, but I have a desire to write and I hope that doing it here will help me improve as a writer, and maybe I can get into writing professionally.
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Darksky_ll5mthReplied to venomous_ghoulIt is magic. Don't overthink it.
The city had been erected in a large valley surrounded by high steep mountains to the north, east, and south, which facilitated its defense. With a huge diamond wall tens of kilometers long and more than 20 meters (65.61 ft) high, capable of resisting any kind of attack.- Darksky_ll5mthReplied to venomous_ghoul
The guy is in the fourth realm of magic cultivation, but he is rank 5 on the system's power scale. If it's a little confusing, I know, but it's better explained in the next chapter.
For magic users, the difference in power between each realm was like the distance between heaven and earth. Just the strength of one wizard from the 4th realm was equivalent to the combined power of a dozen wizards from the 2nd realm. Besides, Aylinor had been a 4th realm wizard for quite some time, so his strength was superior to that of an average 4th realm wizard. - Darksky_ll5mthReplied to Morgoth999
just a fancy way to say fire manipulation
{[Igneous Manipulation][Sixth Sense lv:2] - Darksky_ll6mthReplied to Spacey2303
I apologize, I hadn't noticed. I have already corrected it. Thank you very much for your comments.
This paragraph has been deleted. - Darksky_ll6mthReplied to NoxTheLordOfTime
one of the many planets in that universe
Thanks to the books in the room, Marcus was able to glean bits of very important information. Like that the days of this world had 26 hours instead of 24, that humans were not the only intelligent race in this world or the fact that this universe was controlled by multiple deities. - Darksky_ll9mthReplied to Jeff_KaneCh 84 The science of Necromancy
- Darksky_ll11mthReplied to NecroManFan
Ufff, you'll have to read another 36 chapters for that.
Marcus had ruled out options 1 and 3 as they seemed to be the weakest and option 4 had many disadvantages. As for option 2, it was incredibly powerful, but it was useless if he ran out of MP. - Darksky_ll11mthReplied to Xiao_Han_4542
Thanks again for your suggestions and for marking my spelling mistakes (I hope you are enjoying the story despite them). I really appreciate it.
This paragraph has been deleted. - Darksky_ll11mthReplied to UnspeakableBlitz
grown man's fist.
This paragraph has been deleted. - Darksky_ll11mthReplied to Xiao_Han_4542
Okay, I don't know who you are, but I want to thank you for all the comments you've made pointing out the grammatical errors in the chapters. I've fixed them.
On the one hand, there were the Mystics, whose appearances resembled those of humans with oriental dragon characteristics and who possessed a high affinity for magic. In fact, all Mystics Draun were capable of using magic. - Darksky_ll1yrCommented
Lately, I have received some comments (too many, in fact) about Mc's behavior; about him being too stupid, incompetent, Simp or just being beaten up too much. Don't worry, this will change as the story progresses. However, there is a reason for this. The Mc is a normal person, who died one ordinary day and who (apart from his immortal body, a deficient system, and a skill he still doesn't understand) does not possess any special qualities. He is not a super genius either, so it is quite obvious that he will make stupid mistakes at the beginning. Just don't expect such a person to become super OP and invincible overnight (otherwise the title of the story wouldn't make sense). Thanks for reading.
Ch 79 Chapter 74. 0: Mutual Benefit Proposal - Darksky_ll1yrReplied to tedmosby2016
No offense, but... Please explain to me, how does asking someone respectfully for something makes you a Simp?
"So… Can I have back what I left as collateral?" asked Marcus. - Darksky_ll1yrReplied to CriticalReader
Okay, first of all, I want to thank you for your review even if it wasn't very positive. Even so, as a novice writer,I appreciate any kind of criticism, good or bad, that can help me improve my writing in the future. Second, regarding the numerous grammatical errors and the poor amount of vocabulary, (I know it's not an excuse) but English is not my native language and I'm far from being able to master it. I am still practicing. However, I try to maintain a certain quality of writing, so I always proofread and correct all the chapters before publishing them. I don't know how many chapters you read before abandoning the story, but if you got past thirty chapters you will surely have noticed that where it says "Author's Thoughts" I almost always ask to be informed of possible errors so I can correct them as soon as possible. I am aware that we are not all the same and that we all have different tastes. Still, I'm very sorry you didn't like the story. Thank you very much and I hope you have a nice day (or afternoon or night. I don't know what time it is in your country, Hahaha). PS: I liked the Five Hargreeves gif, it made the review much lighter.
- Darksky_ll1yrReplied to PonjuPonju
Honestly, I don't know how to feel about this.
'Oh MY GOD!! How f**king disgusting! There are really people who have this kind of fetishes?!... uuuh, I'm going to need a lot of therapy to forget this... how disgusting... And I had just taken a bath!!' - Darksky_ll1yrReplied to AlwaysMasked
The Mc is supposed to be American. So he should be used to the Anglo-Saxon system of units and not to use the metric decimal system.
'If I remember correctly... On Earth, the deepest depth that humans have ever gone was over 40,000 ft (12,000 m). But this place seems much deeper than that.' - Darksky_ll1yrReplied to PonjuPonju
Okay. But you also have the option of thinking that maybe the monsters in this story are not exactly the same as the fantasy stories of our world. (This way we can pretend that I made a mistake).
{The user has defeated a [Horned Basilisk] for the first time, 2,535 additional experience points will be awarded.} - Darksky_ll1yrReplied to Wooden_pupper
telepathy
"I see. So you decided to abandon your humanity for power... I mean, I know I'm not one to talk... but my situation is justified!" - Darksky_ll1yrReplied to vicious_sheep
Really? I thought it wasn't necessary since Idetailed it in previous chapters. In any case: Enid is the Alument. Thalia is a 1.7 meters (5.5 ft) tall Asrakian. Cassius is the Draun. Runan is the Rassling. Zarich (brown hair and gray eyes) and Lieon (dark blue eyes and blond hair) are human.
This paragraph has been deleted. - Darksky_ll1yrReplied to vicious_sheep
The Austra continent is west of the central continent. So.... technically yes.
"Exactly. But that's not all the Church of the Living Corpses has been doing. I overheard a conversation between my uncle and my mother a while back and apparently, one of the fourteen True Blood Ancestors was revived on the Southern Continent." Lieon said.