It's been a long time since I read it, as far as I followed the story it was good but there were 2 characters that kept blocking the mc, then I got frustrated.

That's true but I think it would be a situation not something entirely done by the thighs... the most likely thing would be for him to wait to get out of this dubious situation to do that.

I think it's Mages are too OP, if not, correct me, I don't even remember the name of the work.

I think I've read a novel that has this background as the npcs become more and more intelligent and come to life and eventually integrate humans into their society through missions and rewards and manage to control a large number of players.

his analysis is very good, his only weakness is the fact that he is portrayed as a soldier and they have a sense of unity and fellowship built by iron and fire not something totally rushed and little worked. The protagonist has no real favorable impression from anyone other than the moneylender. If you notice he doesn't even try to start a conversation with anyone. It's more like that girl and moneylender who start the conversation. if the protagonist followed what he planned in the beginning, the whole course of the plot would be totally different. It felt like he was being pushed in that direction and not taking action.

It makes perfect sense if he wasn't a soldier...

His behavior based on his past and how he died, as well as I can say a person who went through all this not to be insensitive or closed is at least very optimistic, that is if he does not develop worse disorders such as delusions and post panic war. If you've seen any documentaries or anything non-romanticized about the war, you know that people who fought in the war suffer from disorders, have difficulty adapting to society and have a tendency to become paranoid. Most do not fully recover until they die. The war zone changes anyone from a "nice" person to a "cold" and introspective one. (Of course, they are trained to have as little reception as possible between soldier and target or enemy. But this has little effect due to the series of events that were pictured on the mc.)

I may not have liked it this time but next time it might be different, I don't know what kind of research you did but all the phobias and fears of the protagonist are a highlight. So apart from a few points to improve it's not a bad story depending on the age group you want to target.

Go see Chinese novels, at least they are tougher when it comes to protecting your own family. That's what I don't understand, they try in every way to portray a murderer as someone good, it doesn't make sense in my head.

technically only he can use mana, and her being an ordinary person is a gulf of difference.

não existe bem e mal..

Could you or would you know how to tell me the age range of the people who read your work (plural)? I think I'm just in the wrong age group...

It's impossible to please everyone, but it's one thing to please the majority, after all, if you write good stories you're happy, you make money and the reader is satisfied. Although it's been a while since I've read a good story. I think I'm getting too old for this.

Honestly, from the synopsis I expected something more realistic. Obviously it's a fantasy story but there is realism in human interaction and said personalities. At the beginning, the protagonist was supposed to be a veteran soldier, who lived through the war and is someone mature. From what I've read it sounds more like he's a regular cop than a veteran soldier. He cares too much about total strangers civilians, tries to take care of kids like he's a nanny or something. I feel like he's like an uncle on the corner who thinks he's a soldier. Compare him with the child jonah from jormungand despite the story not being very sophisticated the child seems more like a soldier than this Sato.

I don't know if someone has said this to you before but if you have to explain yourself outside of the story for things that others didn't understand the problem is probably in your writing. this is the second time i see the same comment so it must really be a mess.