Thank you for the review, your kind words, and high endorsement. It made me feel great, and I do struggle to keep writing so every bit helps. ^.^ Thanks! I wish I could have this published, but I don't have the means or funds for such a thing. Posting it online is the next best thing. I'll do my best to keep posting every week. ^.^

Seen the "you're welcome" gif in inkstone, I don't know why it doesn't show in the comments normally. Trying to figure that out...

Things that should've been otherwise the course of events. Like what? I'm not sure what you mean by that. (I'm a bit unorthodox with the way I do plots, but I doubt that's what you meant, because that part has nothing to do with attachment.) Too attached. can you define how? Can you give me details at what you're pointing at? Thanks, because I would like to improve.

Very well. I'm pretty sure you can delete it yourself if you want? I understanding finding mystery stupid. But I disagree with it. Questions is what drive a story forward, it what makes the reader question "what's going to happen next?" "What's behind the next hill?" "Will X character survive?" "Will X character have an happy ending?" etc... That's just my take though. When it comes to world building it's even more important to make the readers care about the characters and the world they're in, before they try to learn about the world. If you want to avoid dragging your novel over "mystery" You might want to try talking about things in the world as if they're common sense, without the whole list of information. You can both keep up the pace, and let the readers get used to the world as the action happens. Again, just my grain of salt. ^.^ Good luck with your writing! The most important thing is enjoying it!

I'll delete the comment above as soon as you see it. Just like it or reply to tell me you did, it's meant for your eyes, not to stay there. ^.^ I simply don't have a way of contacting you privately.

Maybe... I won't confirm or deny. xD Thanks for the compliment. ^.^

Thanks for taking your time with this. ^.^ Yes, my chapters are pretty long. (5k words on average) Again, read it if you enjoy it, put it down if you don't. I'm aiming for the fun and joy of my readers, don't make this into a chore__* Thanks for your input. ^.^ The repetitive thoughts being pointless, is something I'm on the fence with. It's meant to be a pattern, the more repetitive Marisha's thoughts get, the more frantic she is. Tell me if this is working, in case you end up reading more.

I am going to leave my thoughts here. let me know if you want me to move it to the review. Here are my points so far, keep in mind, it's mainly my own personal likes and dislikes, there's no right or wrong way to do things here, if enough people like your work it becomes good. _ *1. The world setting is a good start. I generally love when an author take a location that would appear in a middle of a classic fantasy story, such as "a city of angels", and turn it into the main story._ *2. The '3rd person all knowing' view point you chose to write this novel with, is pretty hard to write. I personally find it a annoying to read, since the point of focus keep moving around all the time. But that's just my personal taste, some people may like it. _ *3. You could improve your sentence structure, as I've mentioned above in a paragraph comment._ *4. I like the dynamic between the wingless angel and the world traveler. The misunderstandings between them are great and there conversation is likeable. (at least for me), it's fun, convincing, and made me smile more than once. You have a good chemistry and a good goofy banter going on between the two._ *Summing it up: The idea and content are enjoyable to read for me, it's still too early to tell with 4 chapters though. The execution and the style of writing is hard for me to read.

The spear, now missing its tip, became a simple staff.* ___ The portal chopped the tip off, and turned the spear into a simple staff.* ___ Sentence structure need some work ^.^ it'll make it into an easier read. Not that I'm perfect at this either, had to do some work improving in that area, it's why I notice these things. I'm still far from perfect though.

Thanks! Working on the next chapter, I'll most likely post it next weekend.

I don't read what I don't enjoy. ^.^ reading is my main procrastination, it's impossible for me to read something I don't enjoy. Commenting though, that's pretty new for me. xD

Very fast, I'm a fast reader. reading since a very young age. But in this case, I simply went back to delete and fix my comment a bit later.

Popcorn pancakes and carrots... that's a way of looking at it. ^.^

I know, it was a joke. ^.^

I'm aware. Point was, not every chapter has to be an action chapter, and spice and wolf isn't an action story, it's ok to have some slice of life chapters. ^.^ even though this one still had some action, so it's a good chapter.

I know it's late saying this, and might be irrelevant in the next chapters. But, having fun writing is more important than timed uploads. Just enjoy your writing, take your time, write when it's suits you and fun for you, instead of the upload frenzy. Upload frenzy is pointless (does it truly matter when the chapters are posted?) and it's ruining the point of writing to begin with. :(

Original! I like the idea.

Not sure what you're apologizing for. Achieving a 100% perfection is pretty much impossible. However, I didn't notice any "feel", the "feel" of this chapter being bad is only in your head, at least in my opinion. Nothing is wrong with this chapter, it's good as the other chapters. I enjoyed the little tangle with the pair of drunk elves, and the chapter name made me think of "spice and wolf" which I do love.

*Smacks the author on the head* "Your arachne creation thinks you deserved it!" Loved the word play. XD I also like how long these chapters are. Great story so far, I really enjoy reading it. Keep up this good work.

Just curious, can you type this name from memory without mistakes?