hmmm too much going on and this mad scientist thing really puts me off. U have 10 billion and yet u can't create something u inveted in ur old life to make that kind of money fast especialy with ur AI operating the production and using that under company name to intro urself to the world? plus whats the mc background? family? he grew up with no one knowing him? place he's staying owned or rent? no neighbours? no job ? Educational background? he transmigrated into a place where with his plans the worlds military, intel and corporations will notice him? and whats with the absurd strength and the whole imortality shebang? seriously? well ill keep reading but i might drop it. its a bit too unrealistic for me especially the toon techs. smh can't fanfic authors limit the urealistic over powering.😒

too much too fast and also mc original body meesing up ang him taking over and fixing it is old. i like what ive seen abt the world setting tho

hmm isnt his movements too overt for a character that has to be lowkey due to his current status not matching his abilities or knowledge? plus the shop keeper did not question how he can create potions has a stables boy nor did the boy just say he was sent to procure it? i'm sensing the author is a Chuninbyo🤣

this muscel memory thing is really irksome. its like saying the mc isnt perfect or good bcos im nerfing him. its a problem that shoulnt even exist.

I want MOOOOORRRRREEEEE!!!!

hmmm I'm just going to say when writing a fanfic imagine if you would spend money to make it's video be it series movie or anime this is better than the ones before but you are still too concentrated on making the MC op early read Vampire diaries: A slayer is born and see what I'm talking about the MC's potential/genius is not equal to being extremely strong before he or she is even a teenager. And I said this earlier don't deviate from the storyline if your MC reincarnates into an existing character especially before the actual storyline starts let him secretly build his strength while allowing the storyline to go on for example Jeremy did not really become active till vicki died use that to let him work behind the scenes while maintaining the storyline. your reincarnated MC can impact the story line in a way that does minimal deviation. But still it's way better than before. Kudos👍

the book is good but I feel like it has been written like a chinese cultivator story or something especially with the way shield has been portrayed like a sect ...... it just feels weird plus "just because you can does not mean you should" at surface it looks like the MC is making smart decisions but if you look closer instead of being low-key and powering up slow but study he showing of a bit plus since when did hawkeye and natasha have super strength and stuff they have abilities at the peak of normal humans it's their skills experience and endurance that make them strong if they have super strength and thereat then what does Captain America have?The book is really good and this is the first time to tell this to a marvel fanfiction author. Stop making the original characters overpowered let the movie guide you not the comic. And as I said before just because you can does not mean you should. WTH are you thinking making spider man your surbodinate? I mean copy some of his abilities sure but making him your underling just makes me want to skip pages because when you start doing stuff like that to the original characters the story isn't far from flopping. to be honest I think you should have made the time between the reincarnation and main events longer like he reincarnates in an abandoned were house in a country of your choice he was undercover when hydra agents in SHIELD leaked his identity(he doesn't know abt them but he suspects gets confirmation in winter soldier) he escaped with lethal wounds after killing most of the bad guys and came to the werehouse for extraction he does MC reincarnates into his body.mc was an assassin in his previous world MC is 22 avengers storyline starts when he is 25. 3years to improve and rise up the ranks to not more than level 8 shield agent becomes *** buddies with natasha(optional) etc. there are a lot of ways to polish the story just take your time. but this is honestly 1 of the best MCU fanfics I've read

I love this novel it's a bit too magical at some parts but negligible overall it's awesome please do you as long as the quality and storyline does not drop in quality

Again? the moment you write a fanfic without the MC being an OC u have to toe the line for example you can't make the MC a werewolf and he needs to be a gilbert to have the hunters mark even if it's wish fulfillment. it doesn't matter even if you give the MC abilities a background story to make it possible as long as the MC is reborn into a character in the original story you can improve but can't change their abilities at most invisible abilities like observation haki(only), God speed reflex, assassin's creed eagle eye,high learning and application abilities etc things that are there but are not noticable till you've been informed or you notice by observing over a period of time you don't add abilities that are not in sync with the original characters Jeremy in the original has the potential to be a hunter even in the legacies he is still a hunter and most importantly human with no were side not does he become a vampire just improve the attributes needed to hunt supernaturals and u can add subtle powers like doflamingo's string string fruit but u can make it string manipulation where he does not produce the string from his busy but can only manipulate strings(this is just an example u can use it if you want) and you don't need to be a vampire or werewolf to be strong in tvd/originals.

yh there is no point but I think it's more of a preference than a justification for example some assassins do not take contracts on women and children some law enforcement etc but that's why I said overview because I think his preference is in taking contracts on those who are not innocent no matter your affiliation, gender or age don't get me wrong he kills for money but there is a line he won't cross after all his peace of mind(placebo justification) is more beneficial to him than having innocent blood on his hands just because of money. I may be reading too much into it or the author did not really clarify the MC's stance but at least it's not as bad as some assassin novels which paint the MC (assassin) as some righteous judge jury and executioner sent down to slay the wicked and fights like a cultivator MC with 1 or 2 unimpressive assassinations in the novel.

that's not bad you don't just up and start killing every killer or assassin has a code his justification just shows an overview of his the part that has me worried is the mess with the lecturer during the exam. the MC is starting to feel like the face slapping type and not the type u need for a MC who is an assassin. He is changing too much because of face and pride doing stuff people know isn't in his character. With his system he will take no time to be better than those 2 boys and the lecturer,there is no need for theatrics hell he could have made the university expell him but gather evidence to sue them and get a settlement which he can invest by using the system to gather info to cover his assaination career especially for jobs out of the country.

and seriously dude just wtf is this harem thing all abt? jxt go with the original story and get bonnie at the time it happened in the series or a bit l8ter harem does not work for most tv series and movie fanfics unless a form of it is already in the original like Spartacus/the 100/etc even then it abt physical pleasure not love so don't even do it

Yeah but before that you have to revamp what you're writing I did not even get halfway through. before stopping. you don't need to give Jereremy any powers he is a desendant of one of the five the hunters with the tattoo. you can just stretch that and make him some sort of slayer with good senses and mental defence you know abilities that don't show physically but enhances his natural human ability to hunt and kill. you can even give him an assassin's creed system(strictly assassin's creed) or hitman agent 47 system or abilities/experience (assassination experience)

man seriously? from what I've read so far just stop continue this on your head don't bring it out.