A little bullying can drive a boy to enact mass extinction.

Its a long progressive novel, but if you're looking for a good action scene, then I suggest waiting until the main part ( The Weight Of Expectations ) is released. It won't be long, and thanks for reading!

The storm doesn't always come directly after ten thousand years, but more around that time ( the reason is given much later ). Thats why the villagers are always so scared, because they are never sure when it'll arrive. Thanks for reading :)

Thank you! The story is a slow burner, but if you want to stick around then enjoy the ride :)

So far so good. I have never read cyberpunk before, but this seems true to the genre. There's a few hiccups with the grammatical errors, but this can be tackled with something like Grammarly. So far, it has potential. The dialogues are well written and the book is easy to read through. Keep going!

Top notch style. This doesn’t read like most fanfics would expect to, it has a feeling of originality. At first, I thought this was based on marvel, as I haven’t watched any of the shows, but this was proven false quickly. Having never watched the anime, so I can only assume the authors devotion to the series in order to produce a well-developing story like this. No bad Grammer or style mistakes from what I can make out, and the characters are well defined in first meeting. The novel gives the feeling that something big is going to happen soon, though I am yet to get to that part. Added to my library

When I’m on my pc a little later, I’ll comment under the chapters with the strange dialogue tags and tense switches. Otherwise, your Grammar is quite good. Right now, the beginning was just a lot to take in. To make the story flow better, I would suggest spacing them out, and using more conjunctions ( although, which, but ). Hope this helps

Honest opinion, this story is an open book. The opening chapters don’t seem to flow very well, especially with the dialogues swapping from “ to : every so often. The tenses also become mixed up, and too many characters are show at once, creating confusion. Otherwise, the plot of the novel is being unpacked fast and I like how the author has gone on to address the sci-if genre. It’s good if you ignore the punctuation and style errors.

Ah thanks! Ill make sure to edit this

A nice little gem. The premise is intriguing enough to pull you in, and I’ve read far enough to realise that this story is very large. The location mentions along with the empires are thrilling to read through, and give a vibe of the culture. The characters especially are sensible to their role, and act well in the action and motor scenes. The Mc is likeable, along with the band of other side characters. There are a few mistakes here and there, mostly having to do with the punctuation and tense mixup, but this doesn’t disturb the flow of the story. Otherwise, the world seems large and the premise is interesting. This book is going places!

Everything happens so quickly. With just a few chapters, the story is developing smoothly

Thanks. Editing out 5000 words hurt, but atleast the chapter makes sense ^_^

Heyo! I’m quite new to webnovel, and have integrated from another great writing platform. The story, I must add, takes a long start. There are light litrpg elements with the main goal being immortality. There is some alchemy as well, and I’m disappointed to find that this platform does not support images or tables in ink stone. Hope you enjoy!

Smooth writing, with descriptions that captivate! When I first starting reading, I thought that the book was set in London. The vibe is indescribable, and the descriptions really pull you in. It reminds me a lot like that book series ‘blue bloods’. So far, I’ve read quite a bit of chapters, but the story is slowly growing from the main plot line which is this supposed ‘bet’ the group of friends made. The characters are realistic, but their always seems to be unnecessary tension at times. The dialogues are good, and I like how the author conveys the characters inner thoughts. Well done!

Interesting thus far!

This was an enjoyable read! Some of the scenes hold solid humour, and the story seems to be developing rather quickly. The relationship between the two main characters and their home life was established quickly, which made their reactions to their circumstances further on realistic to the matter at hand. The writing could use some work. Oftentimes, it swaps from present to past tense, especially in descriptions and dialogue tags. This can be read over though, and the writing is easy to read. I like how quick the story is developing, and the system seems interesting as well. This book looks open to opportunity!

Good start, but you’re swapping through tenses quite a bit. Is this being described from the past, or is it taking place at this moment?

Off to a great start! The chapters are often quite short, but there’s something happening in every chapter that keeps you engaged. I can relate to the mermaids sister and the weight of responsibility she must feel having to cater towards her family, and I really like how the author has gone on to describe her growth in just a few chapters. The characters are realistic with depth, and the story is open for opportunities. The Grammer and style is fine, and flows easily. Keep it up!

Starting today! So far, interesting start