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melissa_kennedy2yrCommentedCh 178 Changed and Unchanged- melissa_kennedy2yrCommentedCh 122 Home Is Where the Heart Is
- melissa_kennedy2yrCommentedCh 48 EXTRA 3
- melissa_kennedy2yrCommentedCh 18 Proof (Part 2)
- melissa_kennedy2yrCommentedCh 103 "The Bags of Sweets Hiding the Bitter Reality"
- melissa_kennedy2yrCommentedCh 197 The First Objective
- melissa_kennedy2yrCommentedCh 137 Forgotten Troubles
- melissa_kennedy2yrCommentedCh 120 Bound Body And Soul: Part Three
- melissa_kennedy2yrCommentedCh 75 Flashback Continues; Before They Went Back 2
- melissa_kennedy2yrCommentedCh 64 Apology Note/Good News/Chapter Release
- melissa_kennedy2yrCommentedCh 66 Education
- melissa_kennedy2yrCommentedCh 1 Are You Looking For A Fight?
- melissa_kennedy2yrCommented
these are your characters and your book. your readers will find things they identify with as well as things they don't. as you said in the forewarning, you're characters were exploring thier expression of lovemaking. not everyone does everything the same in private so it is no big deal if some think it is gross and other's are intrigued. The story itself is very interesting. you are not writing for critics so it is ok if they don't read everything. you will find enough supporters to take the entire journy through to the end.
Ch 49 Miyu's Story - melissa_kennedy3yrCommented
i think we missed out a lot when you did the time skip. little details add warmth and depth to the story. what kind of food did they prepare ? Was it awkward for the maid to share the kitchen or was she excited to share the load? How did they decide who fixed what? what interactions transpired? what was dinner like? was there dinner conversation?
Ch 4 Chapter 4.4 - melissa_kennedy3yrCommentedCh 36 Christmas Special (Side story - 1)
- melissa_kennedy3yrCommentedCh 44 Chapter 44