You’re welcome 😊

So far I think you’ve done well in trying to convey that

Huhu~ I see your point 😌✨

I dont think so, she’s a character from an anime called High School DxD, she’s called Rias. I think the author just chose her because she’s very well known for her red hair

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While i do admit that the ending seemed kind of rushed, i dont necessarily think that it was bad though. Anyway, Vol. 2 seems to have more of a plot and i’m enjoying reading it

I suggest that if you really want to write it, then perhaps read other authors’ work as a reference or guide. It’s never going to be perfect on your first try, but you’ll get there.

You’ll get there 😂👍

Is the yuri coming soon? 😭 not to rush you tho, just curious

Of course! I really like this story

Hey it should be “he has” instead of “he have”

Here there is no need to put ‘a’ before ‘good hips’ because hips is plural

Hi, so you mention at the start of each chapter that you want us to correct any grammar we find, I don’t normally do this because i’m not sure how to correct grammar without sounding rude 😅 but um so instead of “were” it should be “where” Sorry if this accidentally came off as me being rude

Oohh is Core slowly starting to become a yandere?

Thank you for the chapter!

You eat a pizza a lot 😂

Oh ok, no problem!

This reminds me of Shimoneta 😅

Hello, um i did make a comment about a spelling mistake (very minor) but it seems to have dissapeared and i’m not sure if you saw it. sorry i dont usually comment about grammar but you ordered so i felt that i should, but Im uncertain whether it’s there or not

Hey I think you might have meant “on the handle” not “in the handle”….I mean both kinda work but “in the handle” is kinda odd and I’m not sure if you meant it that way. Sorry if this sounds condescending, Im not trying to be, I dont usually correct typos but you ordered so….