in some stories the realms go from nine up to one, and then titled realms like grandmaster or monarch are above that

I've never seen formations done in such an interesting way, really good stuff!

There are little to no mistakes as far as grammar and spelling go however that is the best thing about the story. The MC is childish, obnoxious, lazy and stupid. In six chapters nothing has happened except a below average reincarnation scene and the MC having to go to a library to figure out that he should maybe do a pushup to get stronger. The author claims it is AU, i like a well done AU, this is not a well done AU. Just changing dates and time but not outcomes.

The story is developing really nicely, the writer is noticeably getting more comfortable with writing and with his character and the story has quickly become one of my favourites.

I am gonna hope you mis-worded the authors note lol. Also know that this is your story so take all the time you need ( although hopefully not too much)to get it how you want it.

He did wing chun i think

If I was him I would immediately go to Essos, want slaves with skills to implant in your altered slaves? Want to make a quick buck fighting your captain America level soldiers in an arena? Even if you just want loads of free corpses, Essos is the place to be.

" Their " is right here, as it is belonging to, " their obstacle course ", there is positional, like " The obstacle course over there "

Like, three paragraphs higher.

Wait, wait, wait, wait. He cures cancer and “doesn’t have enough karma points”? What did he have to do? Cure it again?

Probably for the best, even in just these twenty chapters you have figured out pacing of scenes more, looking forward to the rewrite.

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You referred to the round table a lot this chapter, did you mean high table or most of them?

Where do you live? Afghanistan with the cheapest living cost in the whole world is €313 per month.

Grammar is appalling, ideas ar good, story development is very fast. As far as world background, it is just Harry Potter, and for character design the MC is a bit plain and it is hard to get an understanding of his character with the bad grammar.

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Very enjoyable, characters all feel real, and the story development seems appropriately impacted by the MC's interference. I read it in about an hour and a half so if you got nothing better to read, give it a go!