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SY3TEM_ERR0R5dCommenteddirt floor poor is a phrase I've never heard, and will be using from now on
They had already sat through an hour of speeches by the Principal, reminding them of their duty to the nation, the glory of the Elites, and the importance of this chance that they were given. After all, they were just the children of common mine workers, dirt floor poor and unlikely to ever be anything else.- SY3TEM_ERR0R1mthCommented
ah HA! further confirming that Billy is a Bully, smh my head, if only we had seen it earlier
"Hehehe…" Bully chuckled within himself. - SY3TEM_ERR0R6mthCommented
Great start man, loving the ideas. Im going to be honest with you, very hard to read. its just the language you are using and the switching of the tenses, I can't get into that flow of reading, its like hard cuts. I can see your trying to use more descriptive adjectives but some of them just block the flow yk. Try and write how you would speak and add whatever adjectives after, and then give it a read through to see how it sounds. Amazing work so far man, I know I don't have the patience to write and its actually amazing you got the willpower to do it man
Ch 1 Part 1: The City Shadowed From Light - SY3TEM_ERR0R6mthCommented
Is this your cameo!
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don't use a lot of to's in one go. It does make it a bit hard to read
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yeah definitely some tense issues orange. you've put pleaded so it's past tense and therefore furrowing should be furrowed. An advice I got from writing stories was always to use past tense
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maybe my English is off, but what are you trying to say here? that he doesn't come here often? it's weirdly phrased
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Grim reaper Sunny, reporting for duty!
"...Am I dead?" - SY3TEM_ERR0R7mthCommented
Mannn, “fairness is a human concept”- guilty That’s tombstone worthy right there👏
But fairness was a human concept, in the end. The Spell had its own principles, which did not always coincide with what humans considered just. - SY3TEM_ERR0R7mthCommented
At times like these, I hate being a reader cause we can all se what’s gonna happen guys😭
"Why do I have to choose whom to keep alive? I'll just make sure to save everyone. There's no need to decide between you and Beth, so why would I?" - SY3TEM_ERR0R7mthReplied to NobleQueenBee
This ain’t discord, how you still checking for your name🥹
On the screen, a ferocious swordsman in black armor was fighting against a graceful woman who wore a light metal armor and an elegant half-mask. Rose petals fell from above, carpeting a grandiose arena. A dark odachi and a slender estoc clashed against each other, filling the air with the clangor of steel. - SY3TEM_ERR0R8mthCommented
Guiltyyyyyyyyy, AHHHHHHH
"There is a long road ahead of us. In the future, you will have to make a lot of decisions as the leader of this convoy. Our lives are literally in your hands, Master Sunless… so, I wanted to ask you in advance. If a time ever comes when you have to decide between saving my life and that of someone else — especially my assistant Beth, that stubborn child — I want you to choose against me. Keep someone else alive and leave me behind." - SY3TEM_ERR0R8mthCommented
Such praise!… he wants something for sure, speakin from experience😌
"...This bunker, too. Your soldiers are a fearsome bunch, Master Sunless, but without your sight and awareness, liberating this outpost without casualties would have been a tall task even for them. You seem to be able to see everything, and be in several places at the same time. I think I owe my life to that last ability of yours, actually." - SY3TEM_ERR0R9mthCommented
God, I hate that I’ve read so many novels that I KNOW this is a death flag
"Here's my order, Sergeant Gere. From now on, I'll be assuming command of this convoy. You did well getting them here. Leave the rest to me…" - SY3TEM_ERR0R9mthCommented
I imagined him saying this in Beyoncé’s voice
'Oh, this is a good one. This one is great! I see you, [Fated]...' - SY3TEM_ERR0R9mthCommented
Mann, it’s the second paragraph guilty🥹
…Except for maybe himself, when Nephis had spoken his True Name and commanded him to leave her for dead on the Forgotten Shore. - SY3TEM_ERR0R9mthReplied to Dextuary
I checked the replies to see if someone had made this exact joke, get back in the house, your stayin🤝
"No. The Ariadne was destroyed, and LO49 is lost. I am sorry to say this, soldier… but you and your men have made it all the way here for nothing." - SY3TEM_ERR0R9mthCommented
A worthy foe indeed
'Gods. She is even more petty than I am!' - SY3TEM_ERR0R9mthCommented
Ash you can't go down yet man, who's gonna be my guy if you're gone!
Despite his bravado, Ash felt more and more like he was not going to live to see the next day… or whatever it was that counted as a day in the damned Southern Quadrant. The odds just seemed too slim. The Awakened abominations were bad enough, but he at least had a theoretical chance to take down one or two with the help of his powered armor. - SY3TEM_ERR0R9mthCommented
He's finally here, pleassssse let his aspect be about backstabbing
A soldier named Ash was not having a great day. Early into the battle, his powerful exoskeleton armor suit sustained damage to one of its knee joints. Although he could still fight and shoot his rifle, not to mention more than willing to face the abominations despite having his mobility severely reduced, the command judged that the risk was not worth it.