Luzparadise_
(Inactive and still sticking to my drafts.) I am a fulltime gamer and at the same time a Filipino writer.
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okay, I thought this would be some so-called romance story that has been a replica of other stories but I was wrong. Your concept was different and the first chapter was really interesting, you have your own way of making your story interesting and worth reading. Your story has a nice spacing and you did great with the dialogues but there is still a lot of things to improve but that's okay that is the part of life and you have so much potential just keep writing!! Adding this to my lib!
I am giving you five stars!!! I really love this!!! The first part made me already fall in love. It is very well written and very interesting, you did a great job illustrating the scenes in the first chapter. It's proved to me that your writing is on the highest level. I salute you! And I never expect that there would be actions here, I thought this would be some mild adventure story about a doctor? OMG! I thought it was because the title and book cover is cute. Sorry about that, LOl! In any way, your skills in writing are very great and this story is the biggest proof. Adding this to my library!
okay, so I really love this paragraph including the first two !!! I am in love, you did a great job writing them, I love it!!!
Okay, so there is nothing much for me to say since it only consists of 3 chapters. The first one is notice and then so on. I am hoping to read more so I could properly say my thoughts. First of all, I thought that this story would be some kind of Romance? The modern one but the title made me think about if it really is. The chapter's length was average but I can see you put so much effort into writing it. The first chap was kind of interesting since there are some paragraphs in which you describe the ranks and some type of werewolves. you did great writing the dialogues of your characters. First, I was having a hard time memorizing the names of your characters since there were a lot of characters introduced in the first two chapters but I think that's my own problem. You have so much potential and I am hoping to see more, I'll add this to my library so I can read more. Keep writing Author!
Your book cover and the title are really interesting, I even misread the title and thought it was "Incognito" I'm sorry, author! HAHAHAHAHA! Anyway, and what's inside is more interesting. I love how the way you illustrate the scenes, you did well writing this story. I am in awe, really!!! I'll add this to my library! since I'll definitely gonna read further!!
first of all, I love your book cover since Fubuki from one punch man is there. She is my waifu so, points for you hahaha joke. Next, the title... I thought it would be horror but it's like a mystery novel. The synopsis is great, it's really interesting, this is pretty interesting and good but in the chapters, you used *smile* instead of using the " *smiles* " You can just use, "She started smiling," "She smiled" or anything that it could describe that person smiling. There is still a lot more to improve but that is part of life and you have potential. Keep writing!
great job!!! This is a great start!!!
this is a great book, the first chapter is really nice. The synopsis is really interesting and nice, kudos to you author. I could see that you made a great effort to write this story and it really pays off... I mean look how beautiful and well-written your novel is... it's really nice and I love it, it's already in my library because I love it, the storyline and interesting events really pulls me in to read more and who am I stop reading this masterpiece! Keep writing author!
uhm... then leave...
GIVING YOU FIVE STARS MY QUEEN The first chapter is really good and the first start is all getting love-Dovey until someone died... I kept on repeating it since I couldn't believe it but I moved on. The chapters that I've read made me feel the reality that I am single and I will never experience that. Anyway, this has an interesting plotline and characters, with all those colorful-changing hair it's really interesting I am in love with this. You did a great job writing it and I'll read more!!! Definitely adding this masterpiece to my library!!
I'M SORRY BUT I REALLY FOUND THIS CUTE
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uhm what just happened....
this is interestingggg what a good start!!!
this is a very interesting story, the first part made me actually think there will be some hot steamy scenes which made me let out a nervous laugh hahaha jokes aside. there is still a lot more to improve but you did well writing this story. You did a nice job writing the character's emotions and everything. It's very interesting and you have a lot of potentials and I'm looking forward to seeing more! Adding this to my library! I love this! Keep writing Author!
five stars for you author! I really like this book, I'll add this story to my library! First of all, I fell in love right away with the first chapter, the first chapter is very well-written. I am in love with this, I watch danmachi and I really love Freya. All of the chapters are really well-written, the characters, settings... and the chapters are all long in which I know you took a long time doing, I appreciate your efforts. I enjoyed this so much, keep up the good work!!!