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It's a silly little comment but it makes things consistent. Hope it helps! Great work on this story. Keep up the good work! [img=recommend]
Writing rule of thumb: if a number is less than ten you spell it out and if a number is over ten you put the number numerically. Two not 2 12 instead of 12 123 instead of one hundred and twenty three
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A foot?! How big is it's head?!
I think a scalp tingling feeling is the least of your worries if your heart is pierced by an arrow...
240 chapters in and still happy. The editing quality has stayed steadily good with only the odd mistake here and there. The characters are showing a bit less growth than I expected in the beginning but that's my only critique. The kingdom building is steady and well earned. Also the story development is solid with multiple goals and motivations moving along simultaneously.
Overall good potential with poor presentation. The story would be much better with solid editing. The translation (presumably) needs work. A lot of the English feels clunky and flows poorly but it is still reasonably easy to read. Good idea and spin on kingdom building, despite the typical story arc. Some fresh mechanics. The characters have potential to grow.
A smart decision from a main character. That's refreshing!