So as I was reading this, did Lancer just become a male halfway through the chapter? Because the terms you used to describe her dialogues was "He/His". I guess this is one of the things that you should improve upon as it could make your story not confusing to read. Hope this helps.

Am I the only one noticing the drop in quality here? Cuz' I swear there's a lot of missing connecting words before and after every sentences right now, whatever was the proper term; dunno.

000000.1% is still 0.1% though... I dunno, Math wasn't my thing really, but maybe this is just a typo?

I think you should read more stories (Good ones like harry potter, etc.) to base your sentence and dialouge structuring with. As it stood, you got the emotional aspects of your characters down pat, yet the only thing holding your story down is the bad structuring. I hope this helps😉🙂

The narrative is so chaotic and all over the place

Must be a bad breath, that one. Why can't you just use normal terms to describe haki? Either that, or just call it as it is, a haki.

The dialogue is very weird. It was alright for the first few chapters and then it's like the author suddenly changed his nationality or something. This is slowly nearing wuxia/xianxia levels of writing, you can see it from how there are more and more exclamation marks appearing at the end of every dialogues or expositions; as well as the excessive use of honorifics too. At this point, I'm not surprised if someone in the near future chapters would start acting the typical xianxia young masters or what not, which will honestly be my limit for this story, sorry.

The dialogues are a bit too clunky in some places, and there's also a problem with the lack of commas in parts that needed it, making it hard to focus on what you are exactly trying to convey in the story. Though, you do have a good grasp on your grammar already so this story had some potential. I'd stick around to read more of the chapters and decide if I like what I'm reading, for now..

This is the first time I've read of a blessing having a backlash. Is that even a blessing at that point?

This was a good find, not gonna lie but I'm still half-half with the Sect creation setup, because it would really risk the overbloating of characters on this story. You are gunning for harem after all, so it's not an exaggeration to say that a lot of characters needed to be developed properly, which ultimately means that slower story plot progression and the setting aside of unneeded characters. Also, just a personal opinion, please don't add the other perverted dudes that Issei is friends with. Man, those guys are irritating. Overall, this is a good story within this cesspool of a site, which is a pretty nice change of pace, thank god.

I feel like this arc is just getting dragged on for too much

It had all the potential to become something good, but then you went and made the mc blurt out all of his secrets like it was a 100% discount bargain sale at a cheap market. There should've been a further development to smooth down the transition of him telling his secrets, that way it wouldn't have come out as unrelatetable and idiotic as what you've done with your mc. For what it's worth, you did have a nice idea going on for this story.