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Ventallion

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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion2d
    Commented

    And… I’m done here.. Loved reading the book till this point but I felt you were actually going somewhere by incorporating the real world. Thabks anyway

    Ch 554 Finally Free
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    Eternal Cultivation of Alchemy
    Games · Snoring_Panda
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion15d
    Commented

    .. don’t you already have a story with the same premise ? Why start another one?

    Ch 1 Chapter 1: A God is Born...
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    Reborn as Hades In Greek Mythology
    Book&Literature · TheGreekMythosGuru
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion19d
    Replied to Life_sa_Beach_

    Exactly .. we lost out on that interaction. No one cares how he did it. But that first interaction would have been nice to make Yugito’s character more nuanced than just a one liner scene where the character was introduced into the story from an interaction that happened in the author’s thoughts. But again your story.. if yugito is going to be a minor character then it’s fine the way you handled it

    "Yugito it's time, I'll come back tomorrow " Itsuki prepared to leave as Yugito looked at him with a pitiful look.
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    Minato May Have Been Your Father But He Ain't Your Daddy
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion20d
    Replied to Life_sa_Beach_

    I am not arguing about him being able to go there. It’s not about the powers he has or if he can do it. It’s about him going to Kumo for the first time and meeting yugito. That’s something that would have been nice to read about. There is not need to get defensive from a question either lol

    "Yugito it's time, I'll come back tomorrow " Itsuki prepared to leave as Yugito looked at him with a pitiful look.
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    Minato May Have Been Your Father But He Ain't Your Daddy
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion20d
    Replied to Life_sa_Beach_

    Maybe in this case you should have? I mean in Konoha that’s fine but Kumo? The man is a Senju and married to an Uzumaki. No one is letting him go to Kumo. Especially since they already tried to kidnap Kushina once already

    "Yugito it's time, I'll come back tomorrow " Itsuki prepared to leave as Yugito looked at him with a pitiful look.
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    Minato May Have Been Your Father But He Ain't Your Daddy
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion21d
    Commented

    And that’s another dead story..

    Ch 33 Hecate The Witch Queen...
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    Reborn as Hades In PJO
    Book&Literature · TheGreekMythosGuru
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion1mth
    Commented

    Thanks for the chapter! Hope GOT is still in the works :)

    Ch 98 Drake
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    Tycoon Actor in Hollywood
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion1mth
    Commented

    All for him being in GOT!! The movies are also pretty good to get his name out in the market. Nothing exceptional mind you. The 4 are just regular movies. Nothing like 127 hours with its raw emotional performance.

    Ch 94 Back to New York
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    Tycoon Actor in Hollywood
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion1mth
    Commented

    Maybe you something like grammerly or even ChatGPT to correct grammar and punctuation

    Ch 9 Hogwarts I'm coming
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    Alexandros Peverell-Slytherin
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion1mth
    Commented

    The author or translator needs to proofread before posting chapters.

    Ch 5 Gringotts and meeting the Guardian
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    Alexandros Peverell-Slytherin
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion1mth
    Commented

    Is this Eris the same as the goddess of discord? The one with the golden apple? She is just here to cause chaos lol

    Ch 2 The Technological System
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    Building a Business Empire with my Technological System
    Sci-fi · Faux1231
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion1mth
    Commented

    Welp… might be a dead fic now

    Ch 6 Stay Away From the Club, Children
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    My Little Sister Does Not Need Protection, As I Expected
    Anime & Comics · Zimrence
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion2mth
    Commented

    Guessing old qin is randall? If you can’t edit out all the names then leave it as the original names. Right now your only breaking our immersion

    Ch 67 Chapter 67: Born as People from Cloud Dream, Dead as Ghosts from Cloud Dream
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    Building a Gaming Empire From Scratch
    Urban · Zoo of Darwin
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion2mth
    Commented

    Thanks for the chapter!

    Thus the planning of the conclave began.
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    Star Wars: Scion Of The Sun
    Anime & Comics · ArifuretaForever
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion2mth
    Commented

    Thanks for the chapter!

    Ch 15 Hogwarts acceptance letter
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    Harry Potter: I'm James Potter.
    Book&Literature · Nathe07
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion2mth
    Commented

    Well.. this was a disappointing chapter…

    Ch 2 Vow
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    In Marvel with the Force?
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion2mth
    Commented
    Turn the Mandalorian's into my allies.
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    Star Wars: Scion Of The Sun
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion2mth
    Replied to Nathe07

    True but I guess all we can do is assume. Rowling never gave the potter family as a whole much importance hence the lack of information.

    His mother did not at all like having a servant or rather slave attending to her orders 24 hours a day.
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    Harry Potter: I'm James Potter.
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion2mth
    Replied to Nathe07

    I mean that’s probably because Harry knew nothing about his family. Not having an elf was just Harry’s personal choice from hermione’s influence

    His mother did not at all like having a servant or rather slave attending to her orders 24 hours a day.
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    Harry Potter: I'm James Potter.
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  • Ventallion
    Ventallion2mth
    Commented

    Looks great!

    Ch 2 Death and Reincarnation II
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    Harry Potter: I'm James Potter.
    Book&Literature · Nathe07
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