LyanaHowe
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LyanaHowe3yrCommentedLOVE the change of perspectives actually, it gives your world a more robust foundation and your characters even more so in preparation for the future of this story. I must have forgotten to mention that I commend you for not giving the reader any information overload despite the change of perspectives. My heart goes out to Gregory already and we’ve only just met him in this chapter! I would indeed like to see more of this style in the future. I’ll come back in a bit to give you my daily powah stone 😂
Ch 4 Why does it have to be a shovel?- LyanaHowe3yrCommented
A*** he’s so relieved ☺️
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Oho, wait til you meet flex tape!
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A*** :(
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I chuckled too 😂
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Oh no not the basket!
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I know we all have places for improvement but for me, the current style of your writing fits so perfectly with the world and characters you have built and given life to. The interactions between them are so natural and you have their personalities down pat in just a few lines. It was a good example of showing instead of telling. Keep up the great work!
- LyanaHowe3yrCommentedCh 3 Look at that sky!
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... O_O
'Why is he NAKED!?!!' - LyanaHowe3yrCommented
“THAT’S A LOT OF DAMAGE!” 😂
'This thing sure does a lot of damage' Boots thought, looking at his hammer. - LyanaHowe3yrCommented
Oh the gold-engraved weapon is practical, Boots? Bandits will be all over you hahahaha I kid, I kid.
'How practical!' Boots smiled to himself. - LyanaHowe3yrCommented
Fenix is shaking 😂
"Nah" he said nonchalantly, discarding the sword. - LyanaHowe3yrCommented
The goddess has lied!
It was the worst pain he'd ever felt in his entire life. - LyanaHowe3yrCommented
I can imagine her adorable little fist clench. Yes goddess I will follow you everywhereeeeee
"Well, ah.." her smile cracked a little, "not just for that, no. We want to see them flourish! Not be cooped up in pens and eaten by humans or owned by abusive masters, hunted for their skin, culled for existing…" she said with a heavy heart, "Humans have a lot to answer for! This was our answer; a world of our own, where we could do what we wanted, free of oppression." she said with a revolutionary little fist clench. - LyanaHowe3yrCommented
I absolutely adored this chapter! New to writing? This was a wholesome way to showcase your TALENT. Boot’s farewell will always remain in my heart now. My only concern is at the last part, which could use a little more discription as I did not really understand what the “this is not the afterlife” was all about. But otherwise, this was splendid! Absolutely great read, looking forward to more.
Ch 1 How inconvenient! - LyanaHowe3yrCommented
Cat’s attitudes make so much more sense after this, I love it!
On his slow walk around the living room, he thought about his previous incarnations. They were blurry distant memories, out of focus snippets of information that he'd never fully understood. He remembered fighting humans in long forgotten wars, stalking antelope through the savannahs of Africa, the unforgiving cold of the Canadian prairie's, he'd swam with the fish in the Atlantic, been chased through the British countryside by packs of ravenous hounds, flown for weeks at a time, slept for entire winter's, eaten grass all year round. He'd seen the world through so many pairs of eyes that by his ninth incarnation as a cat, he was a very tired soul. As most cats are.