LyanaHowe
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LOVE the change of perspectives actually, it gives your world a more robust foundation and your characters even more so in preparation for the future of this story. I must have forgotten to mention that I commend you for not giving the reader any information overload despite the change of perspectives. My heart goes out to Gregory already and we’ve only just met him in this chapter! I would indeed like to see more of this style in the future. I’ll come back in a bit to give you my daily powah stone 😂
A*** he’s so relieved ☺️
Oho, wait til you meet flex tape!
A*** :(
I chuckled too 😂
Oh no not the basket!
I know we all have places for improvement but for me, the current style of your writing fits so perfectly with the world and characters you have built and given life to. The interactions between them are so natural and you have their personalities down pat in just a few lines. It was a good example of showing instead of telling. Keep up the great work!
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“THAT’S A LOT OF DAMAGE!” 😂
Oh the gold-engraved weapon is practical, Boots? Bandits will be all over you hahahaha I kid, I kid.
Fenix is shaking 😂
The goddess has lied!
I can imagine her adorable little fist clench. Yes goddess I will follow you everywhereeeeee
I absolutely adored this chapter! New to writing? This was a wholesome way to showcase your TALENT. Boot’s farewell will always remain in my heart now. My only concern is at the last part, which could use a little more discription as I did not really understand what the “this is not the afterlife” was all about. But otherwise, this was splendid! Absolutely great read, looking forward to more.
Cat’s attitudes make so much more sense after this, I love it!