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Turbine87215dCommented"Also, each of you will be given this device that I am holding right now. This is called MonsterDex. The Dvalinn Federation was kind enough to give us the data of the majority of the monsters in the island. When you see a monster, just point this device in their direction, and you will be able to see their information.- Turbine87220dReplied to DarthJarJar
What if Felix is the tablet’s consciousness?
"Trusting that wicked tablet again?" Poseidon warned with a deep gaze, "I tell you, that tablet is going to be the death of us. I don't know why, but it feels too eerie to follow its instructions." - Turbine87223dCommented"You know me! That is good! So, can you do me a favor and help me escape from here? I want to experience the mortal world! Wait! I remember that my father can be summoned. Do you think that you can summon me as well?" The God of Rebirth Zagreus stated.
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Which means something wonderful will likely end up happening since it’s the MCs territory
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There should only be two left as Adrian hid in the pocket dimension after he killed the second one
[The remaining three Venti will have their stats increase by 5%.] - Turbine8721mthReplied to trial_reading_bum
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"Is that so? Then be careful. In those wild medicinal fields, there is always the risk that you will run into venomous animals and even some low-level beasts." - Turbine8721mthCommented
Should be Ascalor instead of Koron
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Should be he held Callie not she held Callie
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Imagine how they’re going to feel when they find out that Vaan has also mastered the fire law
"According to Melchior, the potential Soul Master is only a Peak Demigod. However, his power of law is much stronger than his rank suggests. Furthermore, it's also quite possible that he comprehended the Death Law like Supreme Thanatos…" - Turbine8721mthReplied to Vital_Panda
Which is why I posted the correction. Thirteen is the one being referenced not the one being talked to. The only way the current way the sentence is written makes sense is if they already know thirteen is significantly older than them. Since they don’t they should be talking about when they were thirteens age instead of when Thirteen is their age like the sentence is currently saying.
"On the contrary, the boy gained the recognition of everyone in the Auction House. You got a bow, but he got fame. I say he got the better deal out of that bidding war. I hate to say this, but the brat is waaaaaay better than you were when he was your age." - Turbine8721mthCommented
Should be was not were
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I think this should be he believes instead of you believe
Out of those hundreds, there might also be Rank 8 Sovereigns. In a nutshell, this mission is nearly impossible to clear. However, although 'The One' is unfair, it is also fair at the same time. You were sent here because you believe that you have what it takes to complete the mission, so believe in yourself and train hard for your own survival." - Turbine8721mthCommented
Should be but as
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Should be he takes her not she takes her
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Fear in their hearts would make more sense here than fear on their hearts
The Wanderers jumped one by one, and each time they did, the fear on the hearts of the ones who were still on the cliff lessened. - Turbine8721mthCommented
I think this should be trolls not goblins. I don’t think Thirteen has any goblins among his subordinates
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Thats why the piece of wheat saved Piggy Bank earlier. The goddess was watching him from the moment he acquired the piece of wheat
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Didn’t register that there two different cult fan groups so Vahniacs would be the better name for this group
Astoria helplessly sighed before asking with a look of fatigue, "Are the Vaanatics and Vahnmaniacs engaging in their verbal war again?" - Turbine8721mthCommented
Vahnatics would have had a better cult ring to it
Vahnmaniacs…