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oof lots of grammar mistakes in my comment, sorry about that. But to reiterate please keep writing your doing a great job. Idk if i came off mean just wanted to share my opinion on your story

I mean he has that whole "mind-link" thing but I do agree a bit. Its more like obsession then love. At least it seems mutual tho

Ok so small problem. Why is no one going in the dungeon with him? He's in a large familia with lots of people and resources. Speaking of resorces he is legitmently one of the biggest assets to the familia now. He can make LITERAL DIVINE WEAPONS, in additon to mass producing lesser arms. He's also in incredibly close relationship with Hephestus. All this combines into it being ridiculous for him to be alone in literally the most dangerous place of the setting (let alone at all). Where he has no first hand knowledge, and not only does he have to worry about monsters (that he only has theoretical knowledge of) but one of,if not thee, strongest familias gunning to get their hands on him. Personal opinions ahead! Dont be discouraged keep writing! I am, in fact, enjoying your story! This is a much smaller issue I have but the whole "instant weapon mastery" is a bit, well uh... bullsh*t. In melee combat skill/technique is practically 70% of the battle (this is coming from someone who has dabbled in martial arts, I was physically stronger and fit then almost everyone in my class but 9 times out of 10 I would lose. Well sword to sword, I seemed to be excellent with spears). If he just had theoretical knowledge it'd be understandable (a good smith should know the basics of his products), but instant mastery is bull. To clarify Therortical knowledge would be like if you watch someone beat a boss in a video game 100 times, but never played the game itself. You know what you and your tools are capable of but haven't got its rhythm down.

lol we all know the bloodline, but why must you leave such a cliff hanger?

nice chapter ps magic op in elden ring

You could also add: Mansa Musa, Justinian I and his wife Theodora (maybe have them share a ring or have them have similarly aligned powers. Keep them together tho they have the og of relationship goals. You could even have them coach him and Thena on their relationship), Shaka Zulu, Oda Nobunaga, Octavian 1st Emporer of Rome, and Boudica.

"Mad" Jack Churchill for chaos, he's WW2 but they guy brought a sword and bow to a gun fight. And supposedly hunted boar... with a knife... just a knife.

true, but in what way do you mean?

Please for the love of god don't make this a reoccurring thing in actual combat....

" cheese" or "ches" if you want him to sound like a kid

I don't know why everyone is so butt hurt about these chapters they're fine to me.

Its simply the number of wishes. most only pick 3 because it gives you enough to be powerful but not enough to be broken right out the gate

Its less about them not having personalities and more about how much you get to show off those personalities. The more you have the more "on screen" interaction you need to make the relationships believable. From what I've read three girls seems to be the max if you still want a meaningful relationships in stories. If you want more girls just have them be friends with benefits or one time flings. You'll still get the "content" but you won't have to write ten girls opinion on a situation in the future.

That would work I'd also recommend putting "You die" not just "die".