Grammar makes the story impossible to read, and i tried, shame the plot seemed interesting

Or you could still make the awakening in Wano just changing how it happens

Butting in, and it is a personal opinion but i believe that you should prioritize either a sequence of events or a “mini plot” per chapter so to say instead of fixating on number of words

Just read the available chapters, awesome premisse, and it is looking good! Keep up the great work! It’s good that the MC recognizes his role in this life, usually charactes that are born in positions of power tend to shy away from the responsibilities to live life “the way they want” letting down all the people that depends on them in the process. The hardest thing on writing this fic for me would be tying the awakening of Luffy as Joyboy since there won’t be a Kaido but there is time and i am sure you can make it work somewhere else with somebody else (Since Kaido went after Wano especially because of the prophecy) and would be hard to make him simply go somewhere else due changes in the Wano plot

MC supposedly is a person who wants to slack of but the in first’s chapters already is okay with going after the position of Hokage, it would be understandable if he was just saying so people stopped bothering him but it doesn’t appears to be so

Interesting story though by making his power grow by reaping souls you locked any other form of devolopment by training, what happens when he kills everything in his area, goes somewhere else to exterminate the fauna and/or people? It either makes it seems there are respawns for animals/people or the story is forced in such a way where it becomes a inevitability

Interesting story though being honest the idea of reaping soul “power” gives me the impression of a slash and hack game and i hope it doesn’t force the plot in a certain way to feed into it,

Awesome story though not a fan of the new characters or the way MC abilities will be shared with the crew and that it seems to be diluted by trying to incorporate quincy and hollow powers

Awesome story, though something i noticed in naruto stories is arcs involving trials aways tend to drag on and kind of breaks the pace compared to the other arcs

Sytem, writer forgot or on purpose didn’t put the tag

Interesting story, though plot feels forced, and somehow the writer is able to change the plot and make it the same simultaneously, not to mention the MC becomes more childlike in his thoughts and actions the more the story progresses, the last few chapters is like watching a train

Really good first chapters but the kidnapping was way out of character for me

I think it’s a good idea to expand the synopsis since If people go into the story with an idea of the universe/premise they may enjoy it more, usually when readers go into it with one expectation and find out it is not exactly reflected in the story even if it is a good plot/idea they tend to have a negative view on it even if they may have enjoyed otherwise, anyway keep up the good work

Interesting plot and start, thought the initial changes to the winchester Family was weird what broke it for me was changing their association from angels to demons the curse, good luck on the story

Good idea for plot and a interesting start, though not necessarily Harem the MC sleeps with everything that walks and talks

Broken English I can take it with no problem (although an AI should help with editing, just be careful with the one you use), though imagining the MC with this armor kind of breaks it for me (Personal preference, don’t like the design), good luck

I enjoyed the first chapters however things kind of took a turn after, first the size of the continent, the writer took the size of England as the size of Westeros which is aways a deal breaker for me (worldbuilding), and as for character development the fact that Ned doesn’t take his responsibilities seriously enought to slight vassals and not visit them gives me the impression of a entitled prick still living in the 21 first century. Now this part is conjecture since I didn’t read past chapter 16 but the fact that he attempts to create rumors in Dorne sounds to me he is trying to create relations between the north and them, when in reality all northerners would absolutely despise the Dornish for breaking guests rights when they murdered the Targaryen king under truce, and that is a deal breaker for me as well