Sang?

herself - himself (correction)

she to he - correction

For starters, the story plot is goood. writing quality is top notch and the description is well written. The only problem I have that the cover looks boring and unattractive. I suggest you to change the cover with a better one. The cover is important, you know. At first, when I looked at the cover, I thought the story would be boring and quality would be bad as well. Readers start judging your novel even before they read anything. They drop it instantly without knowing the content. That's why, title, cover and synopsis is important. they attract readers. okay? I have no complaints for the story.

Cool Story!

I liked the story plot of the first chapter very much. It has a traditional start like chinese novels or korean novels. Since it's royal romance, I think the plot so far is good. Although it's a bit cliche, it's still bearable and interesting. The vocabulary is good. Only the one thing which concerns me that it would've been better if the beginning sequence started with a scene with the princess crying all alone, then wiping her tears when the servants came, looking all tough from the outside...like she's not scared or heartbroken with the king decision, then the info about empires in between could be better. Obviously, it started getting interesting after a few paras, but the thing is new readers have no patience to understand the whole story. they only the care about the start if they're new to this story. so, the first few paras could've been show and not tell (info) so that those scenes can attract reader's attention at the start only thumbsup. only that, I'm concerned of. The rest is very well portrayed, I'm not qualified enough to tell you what to write and what not to write or what is right and what is wrong. This is just a suggestion from my side. it's up to you, if you wanna change or think it's okay to be that way.

I liked the story plot of the first chapter very much. It has a traditional start like chinese novels or korean novels. Since it's royal romance, I think the plot so far is good. Although it's a bit cliche, it's still bearable and interesting. The vocabulary is good. Only the one thing which concerns me that it would've been better if the beginning sequence started with a scene with the princess crying all alone, then wiping her tears when the servants came, looking all tough from the outside...like she's not scared or heartbroken with the king decision, then the info about empires in between could be better. Obviously, it started getting interesting after a few paras, but the thing is new readers have no patience to understand the whole story. they only the care about the start if they're new to this story. so, the first few paras could've been show and not tell (info) so that those scenes can attract reader's attention at the start only thumbsup. only that, I'm concerned of. The rest is very well portrayed, I'm not qualified enough to tell you what to write and what not to write or what is right and what is wrong. This is just a suggestion from my side. it's up to you, if you wanna change or think it's okay to be that way.

who's him?