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TheMizMind

TheMizMind

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Just a lowly author with horrible motivation...

2020-11-06 JoinedUnited States
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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind9mth
    Posted

    It's alright for an author to give five stars to their work, right? This is most definitely not shameless... why are you reading this with that look on your face? Stop - I don't like that.

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    Echoes of Infinity
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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind9mth
    Posted

    "Bullet Knight" shows promise from the start, with an intriguing premise that captures the reader's attention. However, some noticeable flaws hinder the overall reading experience. The transitions within the first chapter are abrupt and lack smoothness, making it challenging to follow the narrative flow. While the novel showcases an impressive vocabulary, grammatical struggles can distract and disconnect the reader. It requires careful attention to grasp the story, and reading hastily may confuse. Despite these shortcomings, "Bullet Knight" remains a compelling tale with untapped potential. The story possesses elements that can captivate readers once the readability issues are addressed. With some refinements and improved engagement, it can fully immerse and resonate with its audience.

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    Bullet Knight: A Mercenary's Journey to Another World
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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind9mth
    Commented

    How would he know if he asked and he didn't mention a title?

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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind9mth
    Commented

    Very sharp transition

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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind1yr
    Posted

    Oh, just what I needed: a recipe for chaos and absurdity. Thanks, Recipe Club. This book is pure comedic gold! #sarcasm #wasteoftime [Charater Count :/]

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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind1yr
    Posted

    I'm just a shameless nameless author who writes and has commitment issues with their novels. I hope I can bring to you a story you'll remember and come enjoyment.

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    Splintering
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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind2yr
    Commented

    Some grammatical mistakes still, but I'm seeing a huge leap in writing skills. Keep up the good work!

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    The-E.N.D-King-And-The-Lost-Throne
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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind2yr
    Commented

    You wouldn't capitalize mountain here unless your mountain's name is literally Mountain

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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind2yr
    Posted

    I like the premise and the idea behind the story; however, I don't think this was executed in a way that shows its full potential. There is a lot of refinement needed which is very common in new authors, and a lot of grammatical errors that need to be fixed. The first impression is everything, I recommend at least fixing up your first few chapters to hook in the reader! I hope my review helped!

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    The-E.N.D-King-And-The-Lost-Throne
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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind2yr
    Replied to Mary_McDaniel_9483

    Thank you

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    Rebirth: Ascension
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    TheMizMind2yr
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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind2yr
    Replied to Friendlyauthor121
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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind2yr
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    TheMizMind2yr
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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind2yr
    Replied to HyperxSlayer

    Praise the sun!

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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind2yr
    Replied to bunnyrabbit

    Thank you for your review!

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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind2yr
    Replied to Cosmictear

    Action will be more prevalent in chapters 4 and above 😎

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    Rebirth: Ascension
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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind2yr
    Posted

    Has good potential. Grammar needs work, and chapters are very short but can be overcome with quantity. I also like the layout making it easier to read instead of huge blocks of text which can be hard for a web novel. I gave this 5*'s but in all honesty, I don't know what it deserves as I don't read this genre often or ever.

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    My Multi-talented Wife
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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind2yr
    Commented

    Why so short?

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  • TheMizMind
    TheMizMind2yr
    Commented

    Split personality disorder?

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