You're correcting some things that don't need correcting.
thousands of years, yeah
That's gross. You need a lot of help.
Emotion based thinking would be the downfall of human society unfortunately. It's pretty easily seen in the USA now. Anyway, like I said, I'm just glad he is just a leader of a small group.
He doesn't have an inside perspective. It's not true, nor accurate. I understand trying to be nice, but this is a mistake that is simple to fix, but it messes with the order of the story.
You can review a novel poorly for a reason. There is no rule of any sort that says that all reviews must be positive. Anybody who finds writing of this quality a deal breaker will realize it right off of my review instead of having to put up with melting eyeballs.
On the grounds that you're capable of it and he wasn't.
I can't say that makes him a bad person, but, like the other guy said, it's good that he doesn't lead many people.
Who would stand there for minutes waiting for a response?
That's a pretty long time.
You can also use a scythe for that.
It is incorrect. A captains power means exactly that. The apex of bleach means something else entirely. What happened here is that the author thought he wrote about the system already when he hadn't. It is stated later that he received a captains level of power in his spells.
There is no point in using "subsequent" in this case. The only reason it would be used here is in an attempt to sound more intelligent. And yes, it is what would be considered a "bigger" word. "Next" would've worked just as well.
Basic English implies that it's the basics. Those 3 words are not basic.
It doesn't say white.
"After that" is not a good transition here.