What's the point of a character dying if it doesn't have any impact? The fact that the character had potential and could grow makes the death more meaningful narratively as well as emotionally for the reader.

I would enjoy some flashbacks at some point to lazars training with his grandpa to help us empathize a bit with him and understand why he got into special forces at 18

I'd join a discord

I like the writing on this chapter. Specifically how you used the Betas mental turmoil to segue into the personalities of the Alphas. thank you for the chapter! :)

Ji-ah is really trying to ruin the flow of the climactic fight by burning down an entire warehouse with a light pillar from the sky smh

our MC is so much more happy now that he doesn't have to carry his duffel bag

Yeah, I'm just not good with words sorry. I meant that you need another perspective that hasn't spent many hours thinking ahead and fitting puzzle pieces of the story together. You are a perfectionist and it's slowing you down. When you write out the important moments you are looking at it as someone focused too much on a bigger picture. Certain scenes like when Lazar killed Francis were done well and I think it did a good job helping me get a better understanding of Lazar instead of adding another puzzle piece, but the conversation between Lazar and Amandla made the emotions seem less important because of how much precise information I was getting. That whole thought from Amandla starting with "What have I done?" could have been shortened to a regretful grimace and a mental "****." instead of forcing me to understand her thoughts. I'm sorry if I come across wrong I just don't know how to put it into words.

You need to simplify your writing process. Try to bounce ideas off of another person. For the emotions bit: You don't need to write out everybody's internal thoughts. Not knowing precisely what someone is feeling is just as telling as knowing exactly what they are thinking. Let the story flow and let the uncertainty become tension. Let go of your death grip on every single emotion and let me feel paranoid. Thank you for the chapter tho :)

Mr. Author, my lizard brain couldn't handle the earlier conversations between MC and Ji-ah, but now you subject it to a debate about the underlying value of a piece of art? I still don't know how the little schizo MC keeps refilling his duffel bag without getting thrown in a mental asylum. Love the chapter though :) thanks, author

I enjoy the story, but you might want to get somebody more familiar with the language to edit. Regardless thank you for the chapter :)

Will he be able to create better storage for mana later on?

I have mulled over what to write into this white little box for a long bit of time now and I have made my decision. Although I have written and deleted texts many times, I have yet to be satisfied with my attempt at putting my feelings for this novel into words. That is why after much consideration I have come to a single conclusion. This is my Bible now. It is as qualified a holy book as any.

How can we even compete with this guy? he's just in a different class compared to us silent smilers

One of the best novels I have read on this site/app. It is well thought out to the point where I think the author searches the entire internet every time he needs a new monster. The characters that matter aren't 1 dimensional garbage and the writing is great and the author seems to put a lot of thought into word choice which I appreciate. The world background is good, but as of chapter 75 most of the interactions related to higher powers are scarce and the story is more supernatural than fantasy. The story development is still in the earliest stages but I still enjoy it a good bit and it seems like there are plenty of things to look forward too. The only reason I didn't give it a 5 star is because the author has trouble updating consistently. It is understandable since he is doing a lot of work on each chapter and trying to keep a schedule would be the same as saying "please rush your process and give us something that you don't want to put out because of time constraints" and I would rather have good writing. I rate it 4.8 out of 5 stars, but with time and someone else to share the work with I would change it to 5 stars. Thank you for the chapter Mr. author, keep finding obscure fantasy creatures and I'll keep dumping power stones.

It only gets better with time. The main characters are relatively fleshed out, but the side characters and second rate villains are a cringe worthy level of 1 dimensional. However, that doesn't affect the fact that I love the actual story. The story development and buildup throughout makes up for it 10 fold. If you get through the first 50 or so chapters the then everything after is great storytelling.