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I thought he bid 90,000.
What is 'wase'? Should it be 'ease'? I'd be really impressed if it was 'blasé'.
Pretty sure 10 was a failing score. (40 was the minimum).
It's ironic that magic flames are the inverse of natural flames where blue flames are hotter than red.
didn't like *her* idea, but *she*
*his* cultivation
entered *his* body yet?
*her* disciples
*her* little sister
heal *her*
Yi Mingxia turned *her* back to *her* son and turned *her* head to kiss him.
"She tried to use *her* charm on you...
*he* seemed unfazed by her charms.
Your novel is indeed better grammatically than many on this platform and most of the minor grammar mistakes don't usually phase me. My only issue thus far is in pronoun gender agreement (I.E. using he / him / his to refer to female characters or she / her to refer to male characters) because I sometimes have trouble immediately identifying who the antecedent is. It is not a deal breaker, but it does interrupt the flow. Overall, thank you for the story and good luck with your commute and family going forward.
or avoid
At this point she's the only ones he has slept with at all. I suspect the other two simply are not at that stage of their relationship with him.
Just a guess, but I think that should be *overload* debuff
What is he, Charizard?
If that were true the story would never have taken place because Ch 2 says that he got angry when his half brothers called him useless which directly caused him to go hunting and then get attacked leading to the MC getting isekai-ed.
Since when is Sunny his mother? I thought it was the Queen.