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I left this story alone for a while to see where it was going to go. As someone to read the “rough copy” of this story, all I can say is that you've improved every aspect of this story. I've followed this story (albeit a much rougher version of it) for years and can see the growth you've made as a writer. The way you've written the characters differently and even how the characters perceive each other has all been improved 100%. I can not wait to see how you’ve changed the next arc that is incoming, from the way you've changed the (Dwarf/Desert) arc to incorporate more emotion and even epicness was masterfully done!! I'm so happy you've managed to craft such a story, even if you do stop writing and planning this story. Please know that I continuously compare this story to others. Good luck and can't wait to see what that brain of yours thinks up for the next arc!
I love the story and characters, but it feels like the chapters are getting shorter and shorter. I do like the daily chapters but I’d rather like to read longer than 5 minutes. Personally wouldnt mind waiting 2-3 days for a longer chapter to get invested in. This just a lil nit pick though, again love the story cant wait for more.