Just a thought, but… it’s hard to say whether this is a bad idea or not. I mean, if I was just a normal person, I would not want to live in a city filled with cultivators. The chances of dying randomly seem pretty high. On the other hand, if I was a cultivator, I wouldn’t want normal people making laws and ruling over me and other cultivators. Not necessarily because they’re weak, but can you trust a normal person to know what it feels like to be a cultivator? Can you trust they will work in your best interest, or will they do everything they can to gather as much power as possible to control said cultivators? I feel like combining the two would create a dystopian society, where normal people live a life of pseudo-slavery, under the thumb of the powerful, yet being able to do nothing. They’ll never be able to rise up, creating a vicious downward cycle of poverty and submission.

Haha, that’s fine. I mostly wrote it for the author, anyways. Reviews on Webnovel are like 99% worthless and I want mine to be something the author can, hopefully, take reference from and maybe learn something. However unlikely that will be 😞. Though, I may have gone a bit overboard here… The gist of it is, give the novel a shot.

I’m also a little confused here. Bro could be their ancestor 100x over. It’s a little awkward to see him acting his way.

Uhhh… what? So, what did he regret? That he was a bad judge of character? That he got betrayed? I understand loneliness, but that was purely his own doing. He wanted power under the guise of helping his family. Nothing wrong with that. Also, he had a loving family who would be more than glad to spend time with him plus a vast amount of time. I really don’t buy that he was “lonely”. From where I stand, all his actions kept him safe, powerful, mentally stable, and alive. As soon as he got mixed up with “friends” he literally died. If there’s anything to learn, it’s not “I won’t push people away and will grow with them.” It should be, “I’ll be more cautious of who I grow close to.”

I agree with @Bloo_dReaper. Introspection is good.

No POV of his previous parents reacting to his death?

Imma be blunt. These first 10 chapters could’ve been way better. First, this prologue took way too long, with hardly any information other than the MC learning and getting stronger. You could’ve easily cut this all down to 2-3 chapters and it would’ve been much better. Second, these last few chaps were SUPER forced. Everything seemingly happened for no reason. It’s like this was something that popped out of a Random Betrayal Scene Generator and a Random Death Generator. If you were going to take this long to “flesh-out” the MC a bit, you could’ve taken some time to “flesh-out” the plot/exposition that makes the story meaningful. I’m willing to turn a blind eye to it, for the rest of the plot, but it does ruin a lot of the potential of the novel. It also sets a bad precedent. For example, you’re giving readers the impression that your story will just be a lot of random coincidences happening arbitrarily simply to move the plot along. It wouldn’t even take a lot of editing. Just a few sentence here or a paragraph there. Just doing that, you could improve reader engagement significantly, even with a prologue that’s way too long. I don’t really have any critiques for the specifics, as I’m more than okay with them, but it’s just these broader things that might make the novel look worse than it actually is. (This is what a shorter prologue could fix. It would tell us, “Oh, so he’s just recounting the MCs past life before getting into the story.” A lot less room for error while (hopefully) increasing reader retention.) Third, despite the long prologue, we don’t actually get a feel for the MCs character, other than he’s a recluse. I kind of hoped for a bit more. That’s all for now. I’ll check out the rest, see if the writing style changed and you were just more focused on reaching this point than anything else.

I don’t want to be rude, but this is so dumb. Bro literally gave up the treasure first. Why not fight the MC before he got his hands on the cube? I get the ambush, but that also makes no sense. Nothing makes sense. If this dude knew the MC’s power, why bring only “weaklings” to stop him? I find it highly unlikely that he knew the cube would seal peoples powers.

I know he nods here, but I’m honestly just confused. How’d those people figure out his power was sealed? All he said was that the cube fused with him. It also never states or shows the MCs power dropping or being limited in any way. Only that he unleashed his cultivation to try and defend himself. Mind you, that in no way means it was sealed.

I must’ve read the beginning of this chapter 10 times, but nowhere does it state his power has been sealed.

If I could, I would highlight this paragraph, but since I can’t, just know that I’ve noted it.

Ayyy, I know the latter

I feel like the logic is a bit flawed. I mean, why even give him the scripture if he can’t use it? Second, why not let him study the scripture at the beginning of his cultivation? Sounds a bit counterintuitive to arbitrarily say “Wait until you’re 18 to learn.” When there are techniques that require him to practice at the beginning. (I get that I’m being pedantic, but it’s like telling a kid, you can’t go to preschool until you turn 18.) In fact, thinking about it now, this logic is worse than I thought. There are so many people who find out what they really want to do when they’re children by trying out and experiencing all sorts of things. Then, there’s the fact that, not only is the MC a genius, but with a cultivation realm with “Immortal” in the name, his lifespan can’t be low and will only keep growing. Even if he gets distracted or held back by practicing numerous professions at once, so what? These parents… they’re not the sharpest tools in the shed, huh… But let’s see if they have reasons for their actions…

So, Dust Realities are infinite in size, and Globe Worlds are infinitely larger than them…

Doesn’t he have [Arc of Embodiment] though? And infinite mana? Theoretically, rather than modifying evil pieces, he can literally just create his own and/or something better.

Side note: It’s not that the human body can’t use 100% of its potential strength at once, as it can. Our brains prevent our bodies from going all out to protect against injuries. For example, if you were trying to bicep curl 100% of your maximum potential, your bone, tendons, and muscles might very well just snap. That’s worst case scenario, but injuries are almost guaranteed to happen no matter what at that intensity. Still, you could get crazy strong, so definitely a good skill lol

It seems I have underestimated you, author. lol

We’re all losers, author lol. I bet some of these dudes have gone days, foregoing sleep and maybe even eating, just to keep reading. (Not talking about myself…👀)