you are also repeating the same information far too much in each chapter, this ruins the novel for a lot of readers and will therefore ensure that you will lose numerous readers as you keep doing this. Get the story flowing without all the same system messages constantly. We get it, we know all the information and the stats and all we need to know is his increase in power every now and again, not after every couple of paragraphs in every chapter. It is very frustrating.

loved the book so far but now there is so much information that is repeated and not actually needed, it actually feels like you are prolonging the story with so much information that it is affecting the actual storyline itself and slowing it down far too much. You want to captivate your readers and not start to bore them with senseless information constantly in every chapter. Keep the story exciting please

I swear the ghost is in the level 5 body strengthening realm now and not the level 5 body refining realm.

you meant Gary and not Vorden? Vorden is in my vampire system

I'm sure it was purple liquid they used and not black?.

you need to check that you are using the right characters when they are speaking as sometimes the names change and it doesn't make sense like it should have been Martha speaking and not Scarlett etc etc. plus you really need to keep an eye on your spelling and grammar as it seems to get worse rather than better

why so many spaces between each paragraph???

brilliant 😀

this book is brilliant. I love the character build up and the way the story is progressing. I can not wait to read more chapters and actually see where the story eventually ends up in the world of cultivation and forging.

no need for the same information twice that's when readers will stop reading your book.

you need to release more chapters 😄

I don't know why you are putting a load of spaces between each paragraph, how about write more to bulk out the chapters instead of big gaps 👍

I don't care bout mass releases etc instead of putting vote for,mass chapters at the bottom of every single chapter how about concentrate on extending the chapters and getting the names of the characters right when you are writing the story, how could they have found truedreams body when it was ians body as truedream is alive and well

honestly I do not understand why the chapters are getting shorter and shorter the more I'm reading. brilliant book but the cost for only short chapters is not so brilliant

you are wasting chaptwrs with unneeded comments at the bottom regarding unlocking more chapters. you need to stop that, you could make each chapter longer instead of putting that rubbish at the bottom of each and every chapter in the book

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taking the piss out of your readers with such short chapters......... if you want people to vote for this book, write proper chapters and think less about filling your pockets so much.......

I swear the chapters are getting shorter, we are paying for these chapters now so I think you should be putting more effort into longer chapters for paying readers

I swear it said that the VR battles wouldn't affect his stats at all or HP etc as its only training and he could use his skills as, any times as he wanted but then all of a sudden it is affecting his stats and he can only use his skils a certain amount of times, you need to remember hat you are writing and stick to the story and not change it like that.

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