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okay firstly is it weird that I'm in love with the bad boy or is it just my tendency to be toxic? but anyway advise to you author, watch ur word structure here and there but other than that. I love it a part of me is like I need to come back and sink myself into ur work again because wow I'm more than content
"This" not "that" be careful of your word structure
I Don't know if it's just me or not but my mind played your book as a 60's movie. Black and white, suit with those stylish hats and stuff but hehe maybe it's just me. Anyway, I loved it honestly, I couldn't stop reading it. one issue other than that it was really good, didn't like the fact that there weren't more chapters. But I enjoyed it, storyline carries on gently but it's still too short. But I'm looking forward to more.
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Okay! I struggled to find a way to leave a review. I apologize so ill have to settle for a review. The story is good but I got lost and confused at certain points. One thing about readers too much information makes them lose their attraction to the book. There's a common saying, "Show, don't tell." you need to be able to show the readers not just tell them. They'll become restless and stop reading. I zoned out for a bit when I continued reading then had to stop my music and get back into it. It's good stuff but don't make it easy for us to be easily distracted.
So, I enjoyed the way you introduced the world. I kinda felt like I was on a rocketship, overlooking the different worlds. In a way it was really cool I felt like a kid for a second but then another part of me got lost at certain places. I'm used to the cry of pain being 'Ah!' not 'Ha!' that confused me for a second. Then I saw you made a happy sound 'Ah!'... as I said that confused me. Then I noticed an error in continent and that's fine as it easily can be fixed. Then I wanted the story to go and not drag on but overall it's a good story. Looking forward to more.