Grammer needs a little work, but the story telling and use of vocabulary is very good.

the words the author uses to describe each character and situation, that transpires throughout the book are very descriptive, and help paint a very vivid picture in one's mind. as well as still displaying a very wide use of vocabulary helping to make each situation more unique. the characters seem shallow at first but some are starting to develop more depth ex. fox's abandonment issues. this story has some real potential if the characters are expanded on a bit more, but as it stands characters are still underdeveloped in my opinion.