The more I read, the more brain cells I lose on this website.
Yeah except the hourglass is darker blue. He can also manually turn it off and instead of turning red it is just dimmer to represent how much power he has left
Starfire is actually a good idea. I might do that.
MC is an OC. However, his life is based on Ben Tennyson life but his character is different. I’ll try fleshing it out more later on.
Two and a half aliens are now shown in the Omnitrix. I'm going to probably introduce alien names soon as I'm tired of describing them as monsters, aliens, or transformations. Thanks for reading.
Things you can expect: Cool alien fights. Ben 10 Lore. Occasional DC Fights/Lore. Hopefully well-done relationships Things you probably shouldn't expect: Deep mind-boggling storytelling. Perfect comic-accurate setting. Murderous perfect protagonist. (Maybe in another story) Too serious of a story in general. Hope you enjoy the story. Thanks for even checking it out.
Unlike Kane, I imagined Elsa as her for some reason. Probably because her name is Anna but this fits fine.
Didn't think too much about how he looked but I saw the Spider-man 2 game's trailer when thinking of this idea and thought this might fit.
are you still doing this? I'm looking for something to read but this hasn't been updated for a month along with your other stories
Apart from the occasional grammar mistakes and iffy dialogue. This story is actually really good. Maybe it's because this is the first 'The Boys' Fanfiction I've ever read but I'm really looking forward and excited for what happens in the future. Updates look pretty good, although I've only read 11 chapters, the story looks decently done also. What I like the most though is the main character design. He is a borderline psychopath that wants to rule the world, his way of thought is seemingly perfect for someone as messed up as him, and if done right might come off as a pretty generic but decent villain. An MC being evil just for the sake of being evil sounds good to me at least. World background is pretty good as well, if you've never watched the series or read the comics you might understand the story but probably not as enthusiastic as me. Overall from the 11 chapters I've read so far, this is a strong story I'm really looking forward to, but my only wish is for an editor to fix the errors that come every now and then.
Thanks for the chapter! First The Boys fanfiction I've read and I'm really enjoying it. I hope Homelander and Virgil have more of a friend/rival relationship than actual enemies. I feel like Homelander can be very useful and beneficial to MC. Apart from that, I'm excited for the future of this story please don't drop.
Well, I'm going to have to disagree with most of this comment section. I can see its flaws and do think most of the criticism is good but sometimes I get frustrated that people say a movie is bad when it isn't what they were expecting. It was meant to be a detective story showcasing a character arc for Batman in his early days, yet people are saying he's too weak or the movie was too long when they spent almost the entire movie building up so many storylines, characters, and settings. The cinematography was amazing and this was the most comic accurate Batman in live-action, the soundtrack exceeds most other CBM movies and the story is more coherent than a lot of other stuff. If you don't enjoy it, it's perfectly fine but I do want people to know there is really beauty in it... a lot. I'm more of a spider-man guy and read every fanfiction, comic yet I still wholeheartedly think The Batman is such a better film than No way home, not including hype or experience. As in objectively in what makes a movie good. Check it out yourself!
I didn't find it long nor slow, they were telling a coherent story and I appreciated that. There were elements of stealth just not ninja-like, which is understandable considering he wasn't trained by ninjas in this iteration. He's walking because he's been tanking and fighting guys with guns throughout the course of days. It's meant to be a real detective take and you were expecting fighting and martial arts. I do think it is flawed to some degree with other elements but its fight, choreography, and the story is a lot better than most of the things that have come before it.
This would be a lot less jarring if every sentence the guy speaks didn't end with !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I can't take him seriously I just read it as him being so hyperactive and always screaming everything he says.
Not a big fan of the whole changing POV thing but I'll deal with it. Please add more transformation elements here, it's so much more interesting than just brawling with superhuman strength.
She's showing too much expression over things she shouldn't really show about. Well, it is what it is, hoping it tones down, if the author is trying to go for expressions then maybe using another character would be better, not the cold-blooded agent that's been trained since a little child. Love the story though.