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You made your account 46 days ago and commented 402 times. You have commented roughly 8.7 times a day. With that being said, yes, I agree, Gregory wasn't the best name :)
I would have posted this on Royal Road before here, I don't remember the last time a non reincarnation story was ever in the power top 10. I don't think the audience here is really geared towards this type of stuff. They would probably think that its too slow, or just wont be interested in the first place.
Before I read this I would like to say this. Author, your main character can't both be a villain and an anti-hero. I'll give you an example to help you out. A villain is someone who uses bad methods to achieve bad results, an anti-hero is someone who uses bad methods to achieve good results. Sooo maybe change those tags XD
Hey furries are rich, fursuits are not cheep. So go ahead and milk those furries for all they are worth! Wait... that came out wrong...
Author, I feel like this scene could have been a lot better. Don't take this the wrong way, but reading this annoyed me, I don't particularly like being told what is happening without any nuance as if I am a child. The original is to heavy-handed and overly simplistic. A small smile landed itself on my face, the silence wasn't so bad for some reason, actually, it was kind of refreshing, peaceful. "Hmm... What are you smiling about?" I looked to see my father watching me. "Oh, heh, it's nothing..." We continued to eat in silence. There is an example of how it could be written, I added dialogue because of all the subtext that was conveyed in that simple back and forth. Basically, show don't tell.
Is the Charisma stat a reflection of physical appearance or is it more along the lines of likability?
Nobody talks like that author XD "I can't wait to see Uncle Stan!" Mable said with an excited expression, but said expression slowly turned sour. "Ugh, I really need to go..." Mabel's face turned red in her discomfort. That's how I would write it.
"Sir we are losing him to the gutter" "Andy snap out of it! You're going to deep!" "I think we lost him sir."
That's good then, if everyone was like me and didn't derive enjoyment from constantly being interrupted from the story with a/n that serve no purpose other than a quick joke, then this wouldn't be as popular as it is. You could argue that the a/n give to the story in humor, and I would agree, I just didn't find most of them funny. The a/n that just say "insert image of {blank}" are lazy though, they are only there to increase engagement, I would know, I did same thing in my fanfic. The way I did it though made the reader actively think about the story and how my MC's powers could be applied.
I am only saying that gummy bears are tasty and I'd like to eat one ou- I mean eat one
noooo forgot to add the "d" in "heard"
Something no one in this comment section has hear before
Bro is looking like a snack
Kenichi YummyGummy
Here we see the author beginning to dig the hole for his MC to crawl out of! We all know that this "hole" that the author is digging is just a metaphor for the obstacles that the MC must go through. Okay, author, that is deep enough! Why, why are you continuing to dig... That is good author, it doesn't need to be any deeper... Why are you going quicker? Oh jese, he is going to hit the core at this rate! Oh thank God he stopped, as we can see, the hole, although VERY DEEP, will provide the MC room for character growth and- SPIKES!!!! YOU'RE ADDING SPIKES TO THE WALLS, OH COME ON JUST DROP THE MC INTO A VOLCANO AT THIS POINT!!! Okay, okay, ratty, calm down. It can't be that bad, it sure will be satisfying when he eventually climbs out of the hole, just be patient! He should be done with the spikes by now... Is that an Interplanetary satellite armed with a laser cannon? How did you even make that in the few seconds I was looking away!?!!?
I realize I haven't said my opinion on this subject, I don't think trying to find what is optimal is a good way to go about trust, I find it useless to think about. Trust should be a balancing act were you use your critical thinking to decide who to trust and not to trust, but simply not trusting anyone will most likely just leave you isolated from others, and trusting everyone will get you scammed or lied to. It needs a certain balance.
Not fully trusting anyone may cause you unnecessary harm, as shown in the hypothetical and your agreement to said hypocritical. Since someone could be mentally harmed, I would assume that being beaten by your dad would cause some serious mental trauma. Since you can't trust anyone, you won't be able to heal properly from this trauma via therapy for example, and this will cause you some unnecessary harm from the prolonged perpetuation of this trauma and may cause you to heal badly from the experience. This is just one example of why not being able to fully trust someone may lead you to unnecessary harm. So therefore I wouldn't argue that being untrusting of anyone is an optimal state of being due to how it may prevent you from seeking help and support from others.