You write things things with () throughout your chapters sometimes and it's distracting. When you (image) like if people follow your discord they will know it's there if at all. The author notes you sometimes put at the beginning and end of your chapter is distracting. I don't mind detail that progress the story. I believe you can do more showing of culture and the world such as when Muddan does the ritual after killing the players. his preference to rather avoid the fight than kill. These are amazing moments. The things I find annoying is is the chapters with the MC's thoughts for half the chapter or more about a concept or reason why he did something or why people reacted in a certain way. It is distracting often times it is something you already mentioned but decided to expand on more than 2 or three times. I am not trying to say your story is crap or anything as i am still reading it. But seeing certain things over and over does make me annoyed as I read it. I don't pay you so do what you want. I just left a review because i saw a possible 5 out of 5. Most of my biggest gripe is nothing really has happened in the story to progress the world as of Ch. 170. I still feel confused about the story. ( still don't know these mysterious organizations names) Early notes said that First 200 chapters will be building the in-game kingdom but not much building has been done as it's only been a few weeks in game. it's understandable with all the set backs. Just every set back seems to be a world changing event. Give him a chapter or two explaining the mines going to kill some monster and/or discover some issues connected to the main plot so we can start seeing some development there. yeah know? just a suggestion. overall keep doing what you do and I will either keep reading or drop. no big deal. Just do what you love and ignore most of the comments

I like the novel but i have a lot of issues with it as well. The author writing notes in each chapter talking to the reader distracts the immersion. The over excessive explanation of in the form of thoughts and trying to explain world mechanics instead of integrating it into the story naturally. The author explains more of the scenery and why the MC thought a certain thought instead of building the world. The best and most vivid fight scene was the one when Dale fought the agents in the real world. It has kept me reading until now hoping it wasn't a fluke in his writing. Also the constant change in terms saying gold coils then Z(something iron). It is inconsistent. Skips a lot of important information and explains useless informations excessively. I still find the novel entertaining but not one of the best. Also an example of over explanation when Dale went to the Barbarian Hippie village for the first time and the repetition of their height, explaining in detail about the difference in their bracelets but have zero relevance to the story. I believe him introducing the first Barbarian Hippie ( forgot his name Manddava or something) using him to show their traditions etc was an amazing intro to the tribe then describe the general lay out of thle village and how it is different from the norm. it's fine but please stop having half a chapter of explanation or Dale's inner monologue explaining things we already know. it becomes redundant( like my post). I hope high it gets better there is a ton of amazing potential in this novel. last thing please stop using the word albeit it's quite annoying.

Was about to drop this. But it started getting good with the tone of the book. The whole monologue style is a bit annoying. Hope the Mob MC gets a bit better and the writing polishes up a bit to help increase the tone of the story.

what happened to the tapes or video quest he was supposed to give to that girl? I feel that quest is way overdue .

The best thing I picked up in through out the story is how Nana keeps upgrading Lith's nickname as he grows and learns something life changing. from a young sprite to the King of the spirits. This little detail shows how caring and deep Nana truly felt for Lith and the impact he has on her life. I must say this is amazing. Sad that she died but I must say that the small details in this Novel are interesting.

that's true. where I stopped is when he started studying beast Mechs and has that crazy love interest. It wasn't the exact speed of the whole novel that made me drop it but the passion he had started to seem to stretch and was not much real progress or anything happening after.

5 lvl 20 I think is how it is meant to be read

I think stomp and circumvent. First both don't have any cool downs. so he can spam these. Second he can literally disrupt an whole army by jumping 25 meters stomping and leaving just for those alone the surprise factor and utility of it all. if he gets circumvent it leaves the other evasive manuvers pointless. for the special definitely knights suppression. he is a dual wielder just for his play style alone it works and it doesn't say what kind of attacks needed so his solar beam etc. should work count towards it. yes it's true it becomes super op but at the same time it is a 1v1 skill. It can also be used in story as a struggle sauce making his fights seem more desperate. also he is going against gods now. At this point he needs something op to balance those facts. plus there is no CD for these debuffs going away so it can be an interesting plot point

I enjoyed it for a while but after the war ark I was hoping it would pick up. I got to when he went to the civilization that had beast mech expertise. I felt it kind of became stagnant . Does it pick up or roughly stay the same? Anyone can let me know would be nice .

i hope things are okay would love more updates. Glad you are making the story though

I agree like none of this makes sense. what broken machines? I don't remember any machines.

glad so keep up the great work 😌

I love this chapter. In most novels there is only one person whom has the hero tendencies. The MC is always stopped by other bad people never having a taste of his/her own medicine. The question that pops up does make sense like how do you know if that person you saved is bad. The writing has gotten a lot better. Sucks it is not getting more attention. The small details such as this chapter makes the world more believable. I like it keep it up.

The sudden change of perspective as the first comment said. Also what happened to the golden dagger from Solomon? If he needed a new weapon wasn't that supposed to be a high level weapon why use a saber?

These unexplained moments are weird. I think the writing is decent and has a lot of potential but it's like every section is a cliff hanger leaving a whole lot left unexplained. The flow is a bit choppy. Hope it improves in later chapters .

Something I keep getting confused about. Why do the ants refer to Anthony as them, their, etc. and not she?