like come on this is so unsatisfactory there was no big fight or anything so much more to say but man

yes it is but authors generally (in not saying that you have to) introduce the name of the Mc rather than just outright say it for various reasons

I see well if people don't understand this comment is there for them to see you might want to pin this comment or pin one directly from you so that the readers can find it easy

not sure if this was intentional but you said both his of name and new one

tthe first 2 scentincs are not well put together I will suggest an edit later

"jocund" I have no idea what that word even is or what it is supposed to mean please fix that

it seem you have used the same sentence twice but slightly different you should consider changing it or make it differ even more

or fourteen-year old boy

14 year old boy

now I read ahead here and yeah what I said still can some what apply you should have introduced his name a bit later that probably doesn't make much sense lmk and I will try to explain myself better

hummm you could try and introduce his name in a different way say he lost his bearings and asked some questions where am I who am I why am I here and have him answer thoes questions following this you can and more world building and character back story

well a lot to say about this paragraph I will make an edit and send it later (this is more of a personal note)

This The youth's clothes were in tatters, and hot red blood gushed out from his grotesquely wounded arm. Instead of this The youth's clothes were torn apart in various places, and hot red blood gushed out from his grotesquely wounded arm.

also u use youth twice in the same scentince consider changing that to say ex inside that hole a young man around 14 years of age

big enough for youth to enter it should be big enough for a youth to enter it

hi I was wondering if you the author could tell me what your release rate might look like

oh god

alt account btw still aidan

yeah I guess we we would only find out if the author put out more chapter