I'm liking it so far. As a criticism I would ask for more stability in publication and longer chapters. In addition to improving the writing. Which is pretty bad, by the way.
ENCHANTMENT. The summoning incantation (Accio) is an incantation that causes an inanimate object that is at a distance from the caster to fly or levitate into the caster's arms. This spell requires the caster to clearly visualize the object to be summoned in his mind before casting it. It is one of the oldest known spells in magical society.
Si el recuerdo es de Sirius ¿Como lo puede tener Soren?
The teacher does not let go of her old love for Sirius, now she passes it on to her offspring.😂
Totally agree👍. There are hundreds of ways to make the protagonist miserable, and, in a way, give background to his personality. This whole chapter could have been summed up in a single paragraph.
Me pregunto. ¿Si Delphine puede curar una condición como la de los hombres lobo por qué no puede hacerlo con el maledictus de Astoria? No tiene sentido. Además la mutación del protagonista se definiría como algo infinitamente más complicado. Digo, involucra al alma después de todo.
Now even the secondary characters are stronger than the main characters, what a drag. The super strong instructor thing in my opinion looks out of place. Come on, she even manages to defend herself from something as rare as blood magic on the first try and using nothing more and nothing less than Fyendfire, also, coincidentally, without flinching What are you telling me, man? On the other hand, what's the mother doing wasting her time instead of looking for a cure for Astoria?
The story is a little strange at this point. I explain myself with an analogy: 'Like father, like son'. If Delphine is so strong as to be mentioned in this categorical way as a necromancer etc. I wonder: why is Daphne so weak not only physically but mentally? And I don't think it's justified by the physique she should have and doesn't have, as Delphine mentioned, or that school is time consuming. It's a plot contradiction and takes away from the point of the play. Now if the protagonist had contacted a recognized auror or other foreign source not mentioned in the play. It would be not only logical, but a plus for the enrichment of the plot.😕
He then entered the room, saved the mother, and no one stopped him or tried to stop him. What a gross mistake. It lacks some life to the characters. And for the record, in DD that part is the highlight. Aside from the fights of course. I still think saving the mother is a plot mistake. I'll keep reading, indeed, but I'm convinced that later on you'll see that there's no point in adding a new character to whom you'll have to invent new techniques, and whom you'll surely have to get rid of for the sake of focusing on your own. DD already has more than enough characters. On the other hand, another mistake you surely encountered is the reference in the books. If there really was someone as powerful and young as her, at that specific time her power would have been mentioned. And that doesn't happen. Conclusion, focus on your main character and discard her. You'll see it's for the best. Of course this is just an opinion. If you disagree I'm all ears.