You seem like the kind of guy who is just a little bit too cringe. You reek of narcissism and just a all-around douche bag , you understand nothing about characters and that makes me laugh so fucking hard.You’re honestly the kind of people to be interested in those fucked up stories with the MC does terrible shit just because he’s edgy. You reek of teenage angst so I’m going to ask you politely to shut the fuck up so that people can enjoy the story. The MC is the farthest thing from a cuck because the fact of the matter is, the ladies fucking betrothed to someone. Do you understand how any of that works? honest readin your comments just make me laugh. A site like this which is full of garbage fanfics that have no actual substance to them. When something that’s actually decent shows up you people automatically fucking criticize it just because it isn’t your overpowered MC who cucks everybody else. Believe it or not this story makes more sense than any fucking fan fic you ever could read.

This is Medieval times, protein wasn’t a very common thing. You were lucky if you got little bit of meat with your meal. most ate bread, which is not very high in protein. This is why when you look back on the dead in ancient times. when we discovered farming, weat and other foods became the staple. when that happened, we grew shorter. because of a lack of meat.

Thats nice of you. I don’t see people who are nice often. most of the time people get angry and delete my comments.from the bottom of my heart I say thank you.

Bruh you are the most delusional person I’ve ever met. You did not address a single bit of criticism. You are a disappointment in human skin.

Writing a system novel is lazy, no matter what way you put it.

And you have no point so you’re just throwing insults

I am just happy I found a auther who is willing to listen constructive criticism. you would be suprised how meny Authors are not willing to listen to constructive criticism on the site even though sometimes it’s justified, there are many authors who will make a generic system novel and think it’s original or creative. I’m just happy you’re willing to take criticism.

This is just another lazily written system novel. These things appear like ants out of the woodwork. I am astounded that this lazy writing is still widely praised by hundreds of people. Then again these are the same people to enjoy an isekai novel about a main character being a stick. Overall the quality works on the site are terrible.

Also he seems way too young to be fighting battles. Like it’s just unrealistic, to the point where I would say that it actually downgrades the total quality of the work. I’m aware that it’s a fantasy world but I don’t think that gives anybody the excuse. I am also aware that you were definitely not the first to do this not and not the last. Amost fanfics have a tendency to make a character who is overpowered (Typically the mc) overall is just lazy writing. But that’s just with most fanfics.

This is a decent fanfiction. Though it’s still a fanfiction so it’s relatively lazy writing, but other than that I don’t have much to say. It’s just mediocre and the only thing I’m really worried about is a harem, that would really downgrade the quality of this work.

My apologies on improper grammar.

Actually I have read it retard

The dumbest excuse I’ve heard an author make

Take a look at my previous reviews similar to this one but you know my opinions on systems. But this is literally just the same fucking thing. look at me I have a system cool cool cool yeah no originality I’m not wasting my time commenting 10 fucking paragraphs on a Webnovel That doesn’t even deserve All those paragraphs all I have to say is systems are shitty they’re overdone try something new anything, anything at all it would be better than this bullshit.

Grahams where have you been I missed the chapters so much.

AMEN

** I do however think that the character is sort of shoehorned in.I think if we could get more of his backstory in this world and the old world. It would make it feel a lot more believable. It’s just kind of hard to get immersed, when you know the character isn’t all that relatable. Which granted I know for this genre is hard not to find, it feels more like a power fantasy. Which on This site especially it’s hard not to find something like this, where the character is overpowered. But I still don’t feel like that’s an excuse I know this is probably one of your first original works. So what I would say is try to turn down the power fantasy a little bit and make the character more relatable, for example give him a Flaw or weakness even something simple would be nice. Or give him a code of conduct like for example, he wouldn’t kill innocent people.But these again are just suggestions, I hope that you take this as constructive criticism.

Overall the book is fantastic especially when you consider that this is probably his first original created work. it’s rather good there are writing mistakes plenty of them. Which I think could be corrected, but overall it’s honestly fantastic I think the story could be flushed out a little bit more.but again it’s still pretty good.

Overall a pretty good chapter there are some grammatical problems but other than that it’s pretty good

Its ya boy Grymes back from the dead to post another chapter.