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dvces1yrCommentedCh 2 Waking up to Grass?- dvces1yrPosted
the story would be much better if the quality of the writing wasn't on the same level as a 5 year old. a good example of this would be how the author spells 'battle' as 'battel'. no capitalization for a majority of sentences. random and pointless plot points introduced for no reason. overall this novel is written by someone who has no grasp of the english language or storytelling.
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- dvces2yrCommentedCh 140 Chapter 140: Victor returned home. 2
- dvces2yrCommentedCh 4 Light of a hero
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Bro; you can barely right correct grammar. This history lesson seems above your paygrade
For this reason, he chose to wage a guerrilla war, as the Spanish soldiers did against the French in Napoleon's period. - dvces2yrCommented
HE HE HE HIM HIM NOT SHE ASLKDJASLKDAS
The other change was in her essence, she had gone straight up from F to A +! - dvces2yrCommented
'Adriel counted around 30 zombies in the vicinity, the closest to him being only a few meters away.
Adriel counted about 30, the closest to pain a few meters from him. - dvces2yrCommented
game***
"Based on the zombie that appeared out of nowhere here, this is not some kind of zombie virus, aside from the level and this status screen, Adriel concluded, as ridiculous as it may sound, that the world had turned into something similar to a play. - dvces2yrCommented
What caught 'His' eye
What caught her eye instantly was his talents. - dvces2yrCommented
Assign two attribute points to Strength ***
[2 attribute points have been assigned to the force] - dvces2yrCommented
"Okay, okay... Let me take a deep breath and calm down." Idk if english is your first language or not but a lot of small grammar mistakes could be fixed. It would improve the quality of this writing by 10000% Really interesting so far regardless. I love the apocalypse!
"Okay, okay, take a deep breath and calm down" Adriel told himself. - dvces2yrReplied to EmptiBlank
only here. where else should i post this on?
(NSFW - R-18 version of the novel will not be on WN) - dvces2yrReplied to Kalki_gsk
hehe, I'll get around to changing it. Didn't even notice honestly lol!
"Ara, My Prince, It appears you are very.... frustrated. Would you like this Elder Sister to help you out?" - dvces2yrReplied to Immortal_Pigpuff
hehe. i enjoyed writing this part too thanks for reading :D
'I need to speed this up let me attempt to charade her for information then. Since she has barbarian intelligence and cant understand my new exquisite form of speaking that I developed with this broken throat. It will probably be more simple to do it this way instead! Bitch!' - dvces2yrReplied to CoolOp
hahahahaah, it appears great minds think alike.... :D
"Ahn, What happened my love? Why did you stop pleasing me. It's only our seventh round! :(" - dvces2yrPosted
Cool twist on a normal world. Kind of an odd theme to write about, but it is original and cool. Im more of a mans man. So the whole feminine thing really is not my cup of tea. Id assume this would be a great novel for those that have those tastes tho! Great writing and plotline! Excellent detail and deep characters!
- dvces2yrReplied to yohananmikhael