Living_Otter
Just want to show the world what the small world that exist my head
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Living_Otter3yrPostedI could only write about the first chapter ,cause really, I had only read the first part. The world building seems intriguing, quite detailed and bountiful. Though I'm not sure about your ability to keep up the quality of the writing ,if you could then that will be nice. It's pretty good. The only downside is that your sentence are way to long. Put some fullstop in rather string down all of it in a sentence. I'm not sure if it's because the sentences are long, there's some parts I found to be hard to understand. But.. I thinks it's actually just wrong wording or sorts. Well I can't give you a rating on updating stability yet and or story development and character design but the writing all give a 4 and the world building a 5. I wish I could read more and give a more accurate review but it's too early to judge. Overall for now, a 4 from me. Keep it up
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Was going for a comedic perspective
Thank God I found her weakness! Oh my God... this is a gift from heaven!... - Living_Otter3yrCommented
So thts how a viewer felt tlwhen they see this kind of unrealistic thing...
"Who cares, maybe we can spare with her and if we beat her we can ask her on a date." - Living_Otter3yrCommented
Why does everyone felt that MC is a moron or smtg
Now Quinn realised why Layla didn't tell anyone, simply put this girl was crazy. - Living_Otter3yrReplied to Nathaniel_Gaming
Barely understood properly what you just said
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Boku no hero academia?
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I'm not really into kuudere tho
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Big pp
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That's dedication right there
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Fucking disastrous
I thought that my day was going to be like any other, but it turns out that things can go to lightly bad to fucking disaster. - Living_Otter3yrCommented
"Can you mail the bat to me. Is that okay? - Living_Otter"
"I want to capture this one for you to play with later. Is that okay? – Eva" - Living_Otter3yrReplied to BlackSheepKiraCh 30 Two in one Chapter - Hatred and Resolution.
- Living_Otter3yrCommentedCh 4 Mephisto's Killing Intent
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Whatever it is, saying that there's too much adjectives. But is it just me? I'm impressed with the use of adjectives, and choices of words? the power of editor or just the author?
Since he had very little time, he decided to follow his past self's actions and purchase the helmet before closure. He walked out of his attic-like bedroom and washed up under his leaky shower which only shot out icy water. - Living_Otter3yrReplied to TrancendentDao
im curious too
At that time, the Guild Leader, Riveting Night, had noticed him and they entered into a relationship. Those fulfilling days of Draco's were shattered when he found out she had been in the process of sexual intercourse with Local Lord, the other Vice Guild leader. - Living_Otter3yrCommentedCh 2 I succeeded in time leaping albeit with a weird method...