the grammer is really bad it could use a lot of work. try reading through it and treat words for word.

its a good book I approve 👍

probably

gun takes magic to shoot bullets

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

It's great so far, but the way you put the words together makes some of it hard to understand.

its good but your spelling seem rushed you should work on that but good job I like it otherwise