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Lee is based of a Chinese character, and all the other characters you quoted are not from Japanese culture based world, which Naruto is. Would you ever believe an Uchiha father naming his son uchiha light ? Doesn’t make sense

Is it ? You must have loved reading about Uchiha Bob I suppose

Wrong. Japanese use and say Irumi, which is an easternised version of the name to fit the Japanese language. Have you watched HxH ?

Is it ? I read this fic so long ago that I must have forgot. Still, it’s just bad.

"Illumi" ? For real ? No honestly that’s just bad. I hope you didn’t make it on purpose, "illumi" sounds ike illusion, which is a western Latin based term. And you should know that there are no L consonant in Japanese. This just doesn’t work, and looks amateur. Please change !

The true Otsutsuki, the aliens. As they are humanoid but not human, I’ll simply refer to them as the Ōtsutsuki race.

Some good sh** you have there that’s nice

Indirectly so, Jigen’s body has been occupied by Isshiki a short while after he was defeated by Kaguya to escape death, and the Kama seal has been used by Ōtsutsuki Shibai for a long time in order to be reborn again and again to evolve himself.

No don’t worry.

Jigen has been quietly living in the world since the arrival of Kaguya. Kama seal is a Shinjutsu of the Ōtsutsuki clan long predating either eras. So yes.

I remember this one actually

Indeed ! Great ideas

No. More like Pain’s Rinnegan as compared with Madara’s or other true Rinnegan users.

By the way, I would swap "Semi-Tenseigan" for "Half awakened Tenseigan" if I were you. Semi-Tenseigan doesn’t make much sense. It’s more accurately a Tenseigan that is not wholly awakened as Yuto’s body doesn’t truly fit its requirements yet. Not an "incomplete" pupil.

HAHAHAH TENSEIGAN ! Let’s goooooo So glad to see other authors writing on Byakugan-Tenseigan fics.

Actually I starting to think… How about Fujin takes Sasuke as a student instead of Orochimaru ? It would actually make a lot of sense. • Fujin has defeated Orochimaru, and got Sasuke’s respect instead of the latter. • Both are not deeply loyal to the village. • It would be easy to turn Sasuke to his side if he revealed if he reveals the truth about Itachi’s betrayal. • Fujin would make a very good teacher to Sasuke in Lightning release. • As Sakura will be trained by Tsunade and Naruto by Jiraiya, Orochimaru may not be able to take Sasuke as Sasuke lost much respect about his fighting prowess. • It would be great for Fujin to form a relationship with the 2nd main character of the manga too.

Alright. Just starting this. Frankly your writing style is not bad. No red flags, it’s agreable so I’ll read to the end. But there’s something I’m quite bothered about. Why did you choose to make an AU Naruto as main character ? Frankly I really dislike that. We ought to respect Kishimoto’s characters. He is the son of Minato Namikaze and Kushina Uzumaki. Born in his own timeline with his own fate. I mean, you should have just made an OC. The plot was literally made for that. I could have understood if there was a practical reason for having Madara’s son (why not) marry a Namikaze, but the fact the main character is Naruto just means that this Mia Namikaze is basically a genderbent Minato. Why did you do that ? I don’t think there’s any practical reasons for having Naruto as a main character, without Kyuubi, Uzumaki lineage etc.. in this kind of set up, at the cost of messing up with the world building.

Highly unlikely. We do not have any info on any otherworldly canon entity beside the Ōtsutsuki race. (Spoiler) So I will not dive into the AU rabbit hole creating some made up stuff about aliens. In this story the canon dark release will be attributed to a nearly extinct clan in the Land of Lightning coming from the warring states period.

T’inquiètes. Je drop pas x) juste le chapitre m’avait grave saoulé à écrire donc je l’ai boudé et j’y suis revenu hier, Désolé pour l’absence du coup, mais promis j’ai vraiment pas prévu de drop. Trop de trucs incroyable et franchement jamais vu encore en FanFiction Naruto pour drop maintenant.