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Explorer_Avalon

Explorer_Avalon

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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon2yr
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    writting quality? while there are mistakes they are negligeable. Stability of updates? author loves editing every chapter which resets reading progress in library and makes it hard to acccess the fic because of said editing. clearly author has no concept of a google documents. Story development? for the first 40 chaps it was average after it just straight descend. the story with potential turned bland and uniteresting. you could skip 200 words or couple of chaps and still would have clear idea what's happening. Character design? At first realistic later pessimistic cretin. World background? a lot of stealing from other works so propably author didn't find the need for better story background.

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    An ton's Journey ( StarCraft + other worlds)
    Video Games · Muravey
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon2yr
    Commented

    interesting, hope it won't end that quickly

    This chapter has been deleted.
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    Fantasy · Paul_Tromba
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon2yr
    Commented

    build a giant wall* hero doesn't have system to just buy it outright and pop it to existence

    As for monsters? I will just buy a giant wall to prevent them from entering. And to be sure, I will also buy a few sunflowers to plant on the surroundings so that monsters don't approach my home.
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    The Player? Surviving in Terraria as the only existence
    Video Games · Jarron7
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon2yr
    Commented

    question: while i myself isn't that good of an author and wouldn't be able to continue this novel, would you agree for someone to create a spin off of the story?

    Ch 559 Happy Endings
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    Rise of The Undead Legion
    Games · Biako
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon2yr
    Posted

    i can't talk about writing quality since i'm not good with that myself since some chaps are locked i won't talk about stability story: mc has too clear memory of things, most people will have at most hazy memory of things they've did in the past if they didn't repeat that thing memories much. Mc also for some fuckin reson just jumps into bed of women, stress can make someone less rational but for **** sake mc is going for sage look but he doesn't care about stds characters are lifelike world background aside from being a little unrealistic it's okay

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    The Sage of Einar
    History · KENTARO12100
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon2yr
    Commented

    not to sound rude but took you long enough

    Ch 48 Dance
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    In another world with the crafting system
    Fantasy · DemonGodHiatus
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon2yr
    Replied to Breuno

    *spoiler Samuel is evil eisen can use minor magic irl im on 612 chapter.

    Ch 216 Conversing and interruptions
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    A New World, an immersive game experience
    Games · Breuno
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon2yr
    Commented

    hey author, I suggest you read "spending my retirement in a game" similar setting to your own novel except that one is mainly about crafting but not only. It would be great if eldarian could do the same as Eisen irl

    Ch 216 Conversing and interruptions
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    A New World, an immersive game experience
    Games · Breuno
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon2yr
    Commented

    Okay i've posted the novel on royal road, additionaly im working on fixing typos and grammar. Also old chapters will be released on the weekend, each new chapter will be posted once a week

    Ch 13 Problems
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    Tech Priest and Immortal
    Video Games · Explorer_Avalon
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon2yr
    Commented

    i've already submited the work on rr and im only waiting for a bot

    Ch 3 Problems
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    Project Technological Ascension
    Fantasy · Explorer_Avalon
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon2yr
    Replied to EnderNexus

    a litlle too late... I've already submited a ticket to Royal Road to allow me to post it there and i've made the submissions

    Ch 13 Problems
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    Tech Priest and Immortal
    Video Games · Explorer_Avalon
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon2yr
    Replied to Paul_Tromba

    Could you also read my novel? Tt's still very short (under 8k words)

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    Fantasy · Paul_Tromba
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon3yr
    Posted

    Writting quality a few errors here and there, i'm not good at gramar myslef so i didn't see grammatical mistakes. I've read the whole novel in 7 hours Story is quite engaging. Mix of sherlock holmes and dense anime protagonist. Characters are lifelike and immersive. Each character and most of the story is explained making a pretty good background.

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    Fantasy · Paul_Tromba
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon3yr
    Commented

    Magnito? Dude it's Magneto

    "I know you can seal our abilities very easily and I was even worried to even visit your house but we got permission from your parents who said they will not ask for you to help us but they will also be happy if you can help us. " said Eric / Magnito with a serious face as he stood beside Charles.
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    Marvel's Ultra-Saiyan
    Anime & Comics · Shaikh_Tohaa
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon3yr
    Commented

    https://***.youtube.com/watch?v=p_8yK2kmxoo&ab_channel=Kurzgesagt%E2%80%93InaNutshell

    Ch 11 Another Irregular
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    Tech Priest and Immortal
    Video Games · Explorer_Avalon
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon3yr
    Replied to CassTheEevee

    could you show where i made mistakes? i'm currently working on this novel alone so it's a little hard to see all of the mistakes

    Ch 2 Shit i'm immortal?
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    Tech Priest and Immortal
    Video Games · Explorer_Avalon
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon3yr
    Replied to AinzO0alGown

    maybe? who knows?

    Ch 10 Caves of Misery
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    Tech Priest and Immortal
    Video Games · Explorer_Avalon
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon3yr
    Commented

    if ya think this time skip is bad please read "Tree of Aeons" first

    Ch 10 Caves of Misery
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    Tech Priest and Immortal
    Video Games · Explorer_Avalon
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon3yr
    Replied to AinzO0alGown

    it's about jeff and his travels tech priest will show up soon

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    Tech Priest and Immortal
    Video Games · Explorer_Avalon
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  • Explorer_Avalon
    Explorer_Avalon3yr
    Replied to Explorer_Avalon

    12:17 in the video

    Ch 9 The great adventure begins!
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    Tech Priest and Immortal
    Video Games · Explorer_Avalon
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