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That seems like quite a tame answer after he demolished a gang. 😂
He has a very short temper that's not reflected in his usually calculating personality.
This feels like a confrontation that should happen after the main character found all the information needed to discern who this is. But that didn't happen, now there's not even a point in his friend even getting any of that information instead, it made no difference to any of this...
Remarks how weak his body is and immediately starts a fight.
Is that a personal insult? 😂
Conspiracy theorists clenching their fists victoriously.
If he had to make the investigation himself, he wouldn't know who they were yet. That could have added some mystery.
You don't really have to announce that observation directly, it was already quite well indicated by her behaviour.
That's a very sensible observation.
I feel like it could have been a lot of fun to have the two discover that development together, since the plot point had been raised in the first chapter.
You admitted earlier that you didn't actually see him there, and that you had no evidence. Now it's just considered a fact?
The previous sentence already establishes that she sees him as a sibling through dialogue, why the exposition?
Very human moment, and relatable. Good work author.
Why be surprised, you are literally acting like a different person. 😂
I'm surprised he even has to say that, considering they have been friends for a while.
Now he is possessing him, that does contract your earlier statement of him living this life.
You said earlier that he was reincarnated, now he refers to the previous life as a predecessor and a separate entity that is now put to rest. If that is meant as a metaphor, fine, but else it's just confusing, if not inconsistent.
Why does he threaten the Dragons for what he admitted to be responsible for? He killed the envoy, he chose to take the punishment, and yet he's still angry at them?
Shouldn't she bring something to drink, because of the dehydration? Or is there an intravenous infusion on him?