Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. It immediately hooked me like a fish and kept pulling me as the water wet the areas around my eyes. Definitely the water….
For example, the Anarchic Force you used wouldn't just vanish after it was done with its task, it would obviously see be there. Even in the best case, you would have to keep the teleportation short to cut off the hounding of Anarchic Force toward yourself. In the worst case, you would die mid teleportation, devoured by the battle between space and Anarchic Force.
Yann felt really pleased in his heart to watch Caen be scolded. Even though one of his friends was supposedly cared, he could care less about Hawrin. That boy was no more than a servant for him. If Hawrin's death gave him a path to get Caen and Gabriel in trouble, he felt it was a worthy trade.
I dont usually make comments over small grammatical errors because i suck at it myself...but the comma threw me off. You are doing an amazing job so far though.
Does anyone remember what the number two spot was at? You know...when he first took oVer the number one spot. It was so low tha honestly these people should have no room to complain