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Ruby_Red_85412yrReplied to LittleBlueLakeI appreciate your response so I think I will clarify. First I love your work and I do not mean this in a malinois way. The reason my 2 responses are diffrent is because the context is diffrent. In the previous chapter it seemed as if the MC went on a tangent clarifying that transphobia is not okay.It felt somewhat out of place and doesnât alliegn with anything in your writing of the MC previously. Your reader dose not need you to tell them in a long passage that transphobia is bad and gender roles suck. If you want to make commentary on discrimination, add it into the story in a way that feels natural and allows the reader to engage with the material. Either commit to including your opinions on gender discrimination in your story or simplfy the idea you are trying to include in a simpler way. I say that because a lot of that chapter seemed to be over complicating gender identity and had a lot of repeatative ideas. As for your short story, itâ short and sweet but I havenât learned why it was made or posted on the story. My statement stands that your story is a fairly surface level type novel. I am privileged enough to be surrounded by a very progressive community abd ideas that you presented in the story were seen by me as sort of base line. So for your main story that has previously not include topics about gender identity, I would recommend something diffrent from a short story solely focused on gender identity. I hope all of that came across the way I wanted it too. This would be easier in a conversation and I am thankful for your response. Again, I mean this not to be offensive and this is ment to be constructive criticism so I am sorry if you found this unhelpful. Thank you for your time <3
Honestly, the issues aren't really going to taken apart in detail and stuff at all? I'm just a bit scared people may be upset that I've gone a bit serious but also never addressed transgender issues. Which exist. Obviously. Many issues. And honestly, I'm not obligated to address them either in this story, because obviously, this is an arc about crossdressing vampires in a story about fuckboy Hyson and his beta bitch Bebe.- Ruby_Red_85412yrCommented
Honestly it feels like you over explained yours/the main charecters views a lot during this chapter. Itâs okay to be ignorant/make a mistake and people will tell you and you can edit the chapter. I would keep it simple, because the more in depth you go into technical stuff the more backlash you will get
Honestly, the issues aren't really going to taken apart in detail and stuff at all? I'm just a bit scared people may be upset that I've gone a bit serious but also never addressed transgender issues. Which exist. Obviously. Many issues. And honestly, I'm not obligated to address them either in this story, because obviously, this is an arc about crossdressing vampires in a story about fuckboy Hyson and his beta bitch Bebe. - Ruby_Red_85412yrCommented
This is the most controversial point and biggest charecter building that has happened thus far
You're gay and prefer pineapples on pizza? That just means you have great fucking taste, you liking dudes has nothing to do with that. - Ruby_Red_85412yrCommented
OMG HOW LONG IS THIS STORY ARC!!! ITS BEEN MONTHSSSSS
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Yall rember that translater that was forced to compete in one of these idol competeions and he hated it so much and worked so hard to get out but everyone kept voting for him because it was funny....yeah
Xi Zirui nods. "Full blown regret," he says, hoping that if he is especially awkward, the public will see his introduction and vote him out quickly. - Ruby_Red_85412yrCommented
I love that the author isnt making the MC dumb
In fact, he has no idea who the original's intended groom is supposed to be, but judging by the overall trajectory of the other worlds he can make an educated guess. - Ruby_Red_85412yrCommented
I volenter
Bai Mai lowers her cup with a loud clink. "I wouldn't know anything about that, other than you and the other possible spouses we've found for my cousin I've never spent any length of time with a kunjun." - Ruby_Red_85412yrCommented
I just relixed that the spicy chicken author is you...you are the spicy icken author. I thought it was a charecter we would be introfuced to later...I thought it was an important plot point
[Oh, you mean your spicy-chicken author? Hehe, wonder if we can get him to trouble.] - Ruby_Red_85412yrCommentedCh 21 'It' descended on my face and now I've converted
- Ruby_Red_85413yrCommented
Yoooo we see what youâre doing here, Author.
Tang Muxin had become one with her physical body and had learnt a lot of ancient qi techniques both from an enthusiastic Duan Mengyao and a critical Yan Huizhong, surpassing both of them and becoming the strongest in their group save for Da Gong. - Ruby_Red_85413yrCommented
Consent?????
He eyed the apprentice knight's face with curiosity. The usually indifferent face was flushed with desire. He was clutching Derek's shoulder with force and he could not stop himself from moaning in his ears. He was embarrassed at his own voice and hid his face in Derek's nape to escape from his blue eyes which mentally undressed him. His hot breath fell on Derek's neck and made electricity travel up his spine. - Ruby_Red_85413yrCommented
Ah-AH CONSENT!!!
Hansel, now fully aware of what was happening to him, tried to push Derek away. His strength was feeble in comparison to Derek's so he had lost all chances to protest when he failed to escape his clutches at first. - Ruby_Red_85413yrCommented
Very much so
[Well, I'm just saying, if this is a novel, a hot omegaverse smut is important!] - Ruby_Red_85413yrCommented
Maybe Iâm like insanley privileged but 1 mil is definitely not enough to warrent extreme methods in this type of competition
"Just who is going to win that one million dollars?" - Ruby_Red_85413yrReplied to ThirtyTyrants
I was convinced he was into human trafficing so when they said the mob, I was like ohhhhh thats not that bad, in comparison.
"Baby..." The way he says that word, so sultry, nothing like Su Xueyi's sickening croon, makes the fine hairs on Xi Zirui's nape stand on end. "Your husband is working for the mob." - Ruby_Red_85413yrCommented
So closeâ€ïž
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Oh thank GOD! Its just the mob
"Baby..." The way he says that word, so sultry, nothing like Su Xueyi's sickening croon, makes the fine hairs on Xi Zirui's nape stand on end. "Your husband is working for the mob." - Ruby_Red_85413yrCommented
Author is so smart đ„°
Tax evasion would be a slam dunk though, it would guarantee Su Xueyi at least seven years in prison if Xi Zirui got him terrible lawyers - and he would- and after he got out Xi Zirui could just fake his own death, or run away with Han Yu to another country! Su Xueyi would remember him fondly as his loyal, dearly-departed husband! - Ruby_Red_85413yrCommented
Is that even possible?
If possible, Su Xueyi is even more of an asshole in this world than in the other two.