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Dorelus

Dorelus

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you will never succeed without passion!

2020-04-24 JoinedUnited States
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  • Dorelus
    Dorelus2yr
    Replied to ProudHaitian

    That was a diffrent story! but yeah it was fantastic

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    Jake Danger
    Fantasy · Dorelus
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  • Dorelus
    Dorelus3yr
    Posted

    so far I've seen the first chapter. They were both awkward from the start and they love rainy days which I also do and they 2 years convo about fantasy world... imy gonna continue to read...

    altalt
    When our story first began...
    Fantasy · mila
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  • Dorelus
    Dorelus3yr
    Commented

    my dad woulda killed me if I walked out on him

    "Honey, you did not even care to listen to Marcus's side of the story," his mom said trying to turn things around. His dad took his napkin and swiped his mouth "Fine, let me hear it". Marcus had nothing to say, so he grabbed his plate and went to the kitchen, and when he was done washing it, he went to his room and locked his door then laid on his bed waiting for them to go to work.
    altalt
    Teenager's life
    Eastern · Leafy
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  • Dorelus
    Dorelus3yr
    Commented

    He's in trouble

    Ch 6 Is that true?
    altalt
    Teenager's life
    Eastern · Leafy
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  • Dorelus
    Dorelus3yr
    Commented

    broke the man's jaw...not cool Marcus

    "Don't lie to me". "The neighbor across the street called and told Stephanie that two young guys were fighting in front of her house and she could not see their faces cause it's a little dark outside". Marcus's stepmom and Stephanie both walked in the middle of Marcus in Franklin while Franklin was holding his jaw, and it seems like Marcus got him pretty good.
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    Teenager's life
    Eastern · Leafy
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  • Dorelus
    Dorelus3yr
    Commented

    This chapter revealed a lot of things. 1. Jason and Jennifer's family has a tie. 2. Jason always trying to protect Marcus because Marcus helped him from Jennifer or her family but if Jennifer is such a bad person why did he let her introduce her to Marcus? 3. They talked about dirty stuff? I hope that in the next chapter, you will reveal more things. I like the story... 4. Jennifer lost a family member.

    Ch 9 Stay away
    altalt
    Teenager's life
    Eastern · Leafy
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  • Dorelus
    Dorelus3yr
    Posted

    I've seen all the chapters and when it comes to the writing style, I can't judge it nor point out the mistake but all I care about is the storyline and I like the fact that you are showing everyone's personal life and stuff like that and if you continue this story, I'll be your number one fan.

    altalt
    Teenager's life
    Eastern · Leafy
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  • Dorelus
    Dorelus3yr
    Commented

    Jenna

    Ch 4 The Party [part one]
    altalt
    Teenager's life
    Eastern · Leafy
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  • Dorelus
    Dorelus3yr
    Commented

    it's ur first time... ok I won't be harsh

    Ch 2 Thanks for the supports
    altalt
    Teenager's life
    Eastern · Leafy
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  • Dorelus
    Dorelus3yr
    Commented

    I really love it, the style but just add more creativity to it

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    altalt
    The Spy Girl
    Teen · GoldenLeaf
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  • Dorelus
    Dorelus3yr
    Commented

    tbh it's great, I think his girlfriend is right ppl should do what they want

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  • Dorelus
    Dorelus3yr
    Commented

    Great I like the style..just don't drop it

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